Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.
Controversy exists over whether today more time should be allocated to do things people should do rather than do things they like to do. I believe, however, spending time on personal enjoyment is highly beneficial due to bolstering people's moral and motivating them to do required tasks.
The first aspect to point out is that doing favorable things can boost people's self-esteem. Being engaged in personal enjoyments helps people take a break from their problems and unwind by doing things they are into them. People need this refreshment since rigors of modern life are overwhelming, and people need to have fun to preserve. By contrast, people who Constrained themselves to do things they have to carry out, which makes severe consequences on their personalities in long terms. Take the case of an employee who obligates to stay at work for more hours to do things, makes him or her aggressive and exhausted in their office, conversely, an employee who keeps leaving the job a few hours earlier than expected to go to a gym twice a week. Even though he or she could stay at work for more hours they are assigned, they cannot deprive themselves of having such enjoyment. Not only does prohibiting himself or herself from doing enjoyable things hinder them in work, but also it may lead to an inadequate performance due to personal conflicts.
A further more subtle point is that spending time on personal matters inspires people to succeed in doing things they have to accomplish. That is to say, people need the incentive to work hard, and they can easily get this sense of being motivated by having some time for their own. For instance, a despondent employee might be fed up with his uneven career. Consequently, he cannot perform appropriately, and this negatively affects other people's efforts. Permitting him to spare time and enjoy himself, make him feel better. Coming back to work, he has a strong tendency to work properly since he wants to earn money to be able to enjoy more. In addition, the motivation enables him to meet his manager's expectation. On the other hand, an individual who has to fulfill some tasks, although it might sound facile at first, he will perceive its monotonous effects on their mind soon after they implement it.
To summarize, people should be eligible to spend more time on personal enjoyment since it helps them to feel satisfied with themselves, and motivates them to do things that they should do adequately. It is high time we stopped overlooking the fact that personal enjoyments lead to an extreme influence of high moral and motivation on people's success.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, conversely, first, however, if, look, may, so, as to, for instance, in addition, on the other hand, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2178.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 442.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92760180995 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68241461571 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527149321267 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 660.6 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.0577140053 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.631578947 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2631578947 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.31578947368 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.448547786394 0.236089414692 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.155322215511 0.076458572812 203% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.165403843133 0.0737576698707 224% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.360109391256 0.150856017488 239% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.166978204305 0.0645574589148 259% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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