Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The entertainments today consider one of our important lives time-consuming, actually it takes most our spare time. However, the question is, are people spending time in doing important things or in opposite they spend it in eentertainments? Some people believes that doing beneficial things is in priorities of many people because they in need to do it. On the other hands, i personally believe people today spend a lot of time on doing joyful things rather than do things in need to do it and I will explain my reasons in the following essay.
To begin with, life difficulties today is much stressful than before which make people in need to forget themselves by doing things that let them full in happiness and entertainments play the crucial role in a such part. My nephew experience is an example of this, he's a high school students and he use to live mostly a lone with so little friends. In his school many of his peers fight him and not let him enjoy his lonely moment so he feel so compressed after come back from school and thew things that his closely friend is his PS4.He spends almost 8 hours on playing and he use a nick name so his peers didn't know his ID that's why he feel better emotionally by spending his time in enjoyable things after a stressful days.
Whats more, many statistic study shows an increase in the number of people using internet for watching their favourable u tube or playing games than using in study. This is so obvious if we look to the subscribes done to u tubers and enjoyable videos than other channels like national geography or doing homework. my son Hasan is a good example of it, he always watching his favourable u tubers and playing fortnite and many other games instead of signed in some of apps where his teacher send him to do them as homework like Kids-Rates, Prodigy, And Myon and his answer always that he already did his homework in the school and need to paly in which he spend almost 8 hours in doing so. furthermore he forgot to eat his dinner in order, to not waste a moment other than playing in which from many parent's point of view this time can be used in doing useful things.
In sum, although some people disagree, I feel that life stress and many statistics that measure the people spend time on entertainment is higher years over years. I recommend to working on this point to help our generations understand and value the time.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, furthermore, however, if, look, so, i feel, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1968.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 433.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54503464203 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53198685677 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503464203233 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 598.5 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.1344086022 164% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 88.505942033 48.9658058833 181% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.384615385 100.406767564 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.3076923077 20.6045352989 162% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.61538461538 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.5376344086 271% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.356926780617 0.236089414692 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.159363805566 0.076458572812 208% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.138208469947 0.0737576698707 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.22554662693 0.150856017488 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.167346737526 0.0645574589148 259% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 11.7677419355 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.9 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.7 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.0537634409 151% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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