Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
People always need some time for recreation in order to bring down the anxiety of the exhausted life. Various points of view which are germane to the matter being discussed bring us to the moot question whether people today spend too much time on personal enjoyment doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do. The popular sentiment to which I vehemently cling is that people do not spent too much time on personal enjoyment doing things. Indeed, they spend too much time on the things they should do. There are two cogent reasons I will explore in the following essay.
To commence with, the long work hours are not leave time to do enjoyment things. If we take a minute ponder over it, today, many companies have a minimum work hours which is 8 hours. Roughly, the time left from the day is not enough to practice any hobbies or go to any place. A palpable example, my husband, Amory, he is research assistant in University of Chicago. He is go to his work from 7 A.M and back home at 4 P.M. After he back home, he take a nap. He wake up at 5 P.M. he does not have time to go with his friends because many recreation places are closing at 6 P.M. Consequently, he is only have the weekend to hung out with his friends. As you can see, people do not spent too much time on enjoyment doing things.
Another salient point corroborating my stance is that most of the recreation activities are expensive. When people want to have fun, they have to pay money to practice it like admission and transportation to reach the places. So, people could not spend much time in doing enjoyment things inasmuch as they have to spend a plethora of money. For instance, When I plan to go and play basketball in the recreation center near my home, I have to pay Ten dollars each time I go there. It is too much money comparable to my low budget and it will burden my monetary balance. Consequently, I rarely go to the basketball center because I could not pay such expensive fees. We conclude that people are not spend too much time on doing enjoyment things.
To recapitulate, whether people have no time because of the longtime of work hours, or the expensive fees of the recreation activity. People do not spend too much time in doing enjoyment things rather than things they have to do.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, if, so, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1881.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 422.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.45734597156 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45040769616 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.447867298578 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 582.3 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.6047364262 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.5714285714 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0952380952 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.61904761905 5.45110844103 30% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.489955771912 0.236089414692 208% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.180412086492 0.076458572812 236% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.218607896644 0.0737576698707 296% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.368324655187 0.150856017488 244% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.185578372765 0.0645574589148 287% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.59 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.02 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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