Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
With the development of modern education, students are facing more complicated relationship with variety of people during school time. so, there is an argument that whether students are more influenced by their teachers or by their friends. From my perspective, the students are more likely to communicate with contemporary people and thus being affected by them, and the reasons are as below.
First and foremost, students, especially in the primary or junior high school, are tend to play with their friends instead of listen to the superior people like teachers or parents. when adolescents lives together, they may talk about what they favorite most, and subsequently, they will learn the new things from their friends, such as fashion style, advanced video game, or the latest comic books. For instances, when I was studying in the school, I always talk with my deskmate during whether class time or spare time, and both of us can make a interesting conversation on our favorite topics which hardly understood by elder. so, teenagers are more willing to accompany with their friends since they have same interests.
Furthermore, adolescents are also dislike what teachers done to them even if for good purpose. A survey conducted by experts from Peking University shows that over 84.42% of adolescents are feeling bored or annoy when teachers and parents talks to them. As one of the interviewer said, the superior always blame them seriously, more importantly, a huge gap of experiences and knowledge between two generations let most of elders cannot understand the joke or funny stuff made by teenagers. As a result, children refuse to close with the teachers.
In a nutshell, students in school are more likely being influenced and affected by those contemporary people surrounding them, because most of them have same hobbies and thus can make a lasting relationship. On the contrary, teenagers talk less with their teachers for the strong differences of every aspects of life, and consequently, students are hardly being influenced by them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, furthermore, if, may, so, thus, for instance, such as, as a result, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1726.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 331.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21450151057 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80396067898 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.561933534743 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 524.7 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.2122317294 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.769230769 100.406767564 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4615384615 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.46153846154 5.45110844103 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223533803777 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0953258311064 0.076458572812 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0872537233569 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153355550579 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0876905349858 0.0645574589148 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 11.7677419355 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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