Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
From many years ago technology has affected human’s life in a way that it is not anymore similar to the life people had twenty years ago. In most aspects of life technology has had a positive effect and made life more pleasant. In the other hand, it has led to many problems. In my opinion reduced children creativity is one of the problems resulted from technology.
First of all, technology has attracted children more than adults. Since, many alluring computer games has been programmed as a result of progress in technology. Therefore, children spend most of their time on computers instead of playing in yards. In addition these kinds of games has a little addiction effects, means when a person plays, it becomes difficult for him/her to abandon them. This leaves no more time for children to do anything creative like painting or play with clay. As a result their brain paths will develop in only one direction. When I was child I used to play in yard with my friends and siblings. Handmade crafts were also one my favorite hobbies. But now my nephew does not do any of these activity. He always sits in front of computer and play computer games. He never goes anywhere without his tablet. I think all these problems are results of technology and the only solution is to protect children from rapid progressing technology.
Second, today technology makes everything available in a prepared form so, children do not need to think about anything. When they don’t use their brain to think, an undeveloped brain will cause children to become less creative. in the past children made many tools for playing for example they constructed something that can trap a mouse by using rope, wood and nails. After that they played with what was their own product. But, today everything is available in stores. I remember when I was child I needed to create many colors for my painting by mixing principal colors in different proportions. However today there are pallets of colors in stores which is more than necessary. Therefore, there is no need to think and try to create what is needed today. Which makes children less creative than the time when I was child.
In conclusion. I believe that although technology has made life more enjoyable and efficient, but it has created many problems. Since children spend a lot of time playing computer game and they do not need to use their hands and minds for making tools, one of the problems arose as a result of technology, is less creativity of children.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ther hand, it has led to many problems. In my opinion reduced children creativity ...
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...mputers instead of playing in yards. In addition these kinds of games has a little addic...
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...eative like painting or play with clay. As a result their brain paths will develop...
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...s. But now my nephew does not do any of these activity. He always sits in front of computer an...
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... a mouse by using rope, wood and nails. After that they played with what was their ow...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, for example, i think, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2079.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 432.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8125 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57690254771 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497685185185 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 650.7 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.8003320065 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.0 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207182461548 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0538161011278 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.053603292997 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135533432655 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0460265295974 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.32 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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