Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In today’s world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Development of technology in the modern world is a deniable issue which the human being must consider in his life. With this in mind, moving with high-speed technology is another matter can be brought to consciousness. The question is, working with high pace and taking risk is better or being calmness and work slowly to do accurately and correctly. I strongly believe that heightening the speed of working and being compatible with this high tech world has more beneficial than working slowly. Some following reasons come to support my idea.
To commence, one of the compelling reasons that justify the thesis is that the world is changing quickly at a blink speed and development of technology is considerable all around the world. It is reasonable that we synchronize ourselves with these transformations and be compatible with them to enhance our level in every situation. Needless to say that most people must learn how to work with computer and Internet while they should utilize them at home, university or workplace. To shed more light on the issue, according to the result of a study posted in Time Magazine, by 22nd century all of the manpower will change to mechanical and robot form and everything will be facilitated by machines and giant computers. Simply stated, it is necessary of the new modern world to do and learn as quickly as the technology.
Alongside with the first reason elaborated above, taking risk is a fundamental key to get experience, a new experience which will cause the following success. From a psychological standpoint, taking enormous risk and doing big things in the life is such a getting new experience which pushes you to the successful future. The psychologist believes that you should never give up and keep going to achieve your goal. It is all transparent that working in a usual manner and your life be full of commonplace duties, you never expect that your life change over time. Informed of the fact that, you maybe make irrecoverable mistakes, however, it will make you and your life. Because it was an assistant for you to obtain prime lesson from those mistakes. For instance, before I wish to study my master degree in a big university in the capital city to get an experience of living solely in a metropolitan city, but my family was opposed with this decision and they intend that I choose my hometown for studying. What I did was to go against their desire and selected my favorite university in the capital city. Now, I am a girl who gets the useful experience of living alone and studying and working successfully.
Drawing upon the reasons, although there are always some exceptions which are excluded from the general rule, I do agree that working at high speed and taking risk is important in today's world. To recapitulate the reasons, not only do people can be compatible with the pace of developing technology which is helpful for them, but also taking a risk and making mistake provide an opportunity of getting experience and improving the position in today's society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 590, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...osted in Time Magazine, by 22nd century all of the manpower will change to mechanical and ...
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Line 3, column 450, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a usual manner" with adverb for "usual"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...oal. It is all transparent that working in a usual manner and your life be full of commonplace du...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, while, as to, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2524.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 516.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89147286822 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76609204519 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78007236518 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513565891473 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 805.5 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.4425339366 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.19047619 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5714285714 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.14285714286 5.45110844103 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294852548194 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0846842437994 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0556291197403 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176006266513 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0311343161643 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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