Independent writing TPO26
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the modern technological world, finding a suitable occupation is a pivotal issue that everyone is involved. Selecting the appropriate job will cause unstoppable successes among the youth. A question which is a matter of debate, a controversial one, is whether parents allow themselves to impose their children to choose their job or let them have the authority of selecting a different job from their parents. Although it is a little hard to a consensus on this issue, I am, to a great extent, on the belief that obviously letting children choose their own occupation and fortune in lien of selecting the same job of their parents are too enormous to fathom.
To commence, one of the compelling reasons that justify the thesis is that children are free to choose their major and consequently their profession themselves. Though, the parent's experience could be beneficial for their kids to have the best choice, sometimes interfering more than usual amount will be destructive. Psychologically speaking, having mandatory behavior towards children to have a selection in their life based on their parent's intention causes that children could not discern what is useful for them and they would be unsatisfied from their future. So forth, the more restricting the kids, the more depending themselves on their parent’s decisions and this is the most extreme betrayal of them.
Alongside with the first reason elaborated above, getting new experience separable from the parent's default knowledge is another point which requires meticulous attention. Simply stated, children should take the risk in their lives to get prime practical experience for being successful in their professional life. Informed the fact that, while they endeavor to have the best rendering among their challenges, they are taking the best strides to accomplish their tasks effectively. However they experience a lot of anxiety and suffering, they could deal with more hardiness and solve problems themselves to have a good fortune and successful job.
Finally, it is all transparent that in the past there were constraints to have extreme options to select a job due to the situation were dominated in the society in low knowledge about the technology. Logically speaking, in modern communities every day, advent of new technology and having high tech societies demanding new jobs. Whereas this situation offers new opportunities to the young people, they will have many various chances to choose their job different from than ever. Therefore, they must be ready to confront with the new world and parent’s job may be old-dated for them and be unpractical now.
To wrap it up, it is my deep belief that children are responsible for their own individual life to choose their occupation. Although parents can assist themselves to have the best choice, kids are the persons who make their fates. As I mentioned above, they will be independent besides getting new useful experience by taking the risk and having a different job from their parents. Also, nowadays the opportunities imposed by new technologies provide new jobs that were taken by the youth. All in all, it is anticipated in the future the proportion of children who follow their parent's job will drop more and more.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 482, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
... to accomplish their tasks effectively. However they experience a lot of anxiety and su...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, consequently, finally, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, whereas, while, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2738.0 1977.66487455 138% => OK
No of words: 527.0 407.700716846 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1954459203 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79129216042 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85997977571 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487666034156 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 841.5 618.680645161 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.6162922815 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.380952381 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0952380952 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.28571428571 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.389122387488 0.236089414692 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128609195478 0.076458572812 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0790257448479 0.0737576698707 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.249743003283 0.150856017488 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0640026955427 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 86.8835125448 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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