Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In today’s world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is no doubt that after the industrial revolution the speed has become a pivotal element of human's life, and specially after the World War II it also has bacome much more significant in comparison to all human history so that the life is in state of flux Hence, I totally concur with the statemanet and I have numerous reasons why I subscrib to this particular attitude elaborating cogently in the ensuing paragraph.
First of all, we should take into account this important fact that, the life's speed is growing all days, particularly in the 21st century. To be more specific, we see that most of the new inventions are those which increase the life's speed insanely, such as internet, functional smart phones or even different typed of transportation vehicles. In such a rapid world, every individuals need to do their job fast so that they could survive and not get behind. Besides, it is crucial to make risk in such circumstances, because as it is obvious in some cases you have to take gamble or loose your position. Thus, I guess it is both needed to run with the flow and not to tangled up with the slow motions.
In approaching this issue, apart from the point that I have mentioned above, one should consider this another subtle point that the modern life is becoming much more superficial. In other words, most people not only do not really care about the actual outcomes of what they are are doing, but also care about doing that deed. In this regard, I have read a paper recently, which was a survey conducted in psychology department of Yale university. In this distinct research, the scientists ask the variety of people's opinion about if they really care about their job quality or not. The results was surprising. Most of the attendants mentioned that the only thing that matters for them finishing their duty so that they could start another one. One them stated that the more duty I do in one they, the more positive feeling I have about myself. The scholars indicate that the modern individuals are speed addicted persons, who need to fulfill their task rapidly without paying attention to the quality. The modern life demands us quantity, and doesn't really concern about quality. Even in the job interview you are judged based on number of abilities, or skills that you know.
Taking all aforementioned arguments into account leading us to the conclusion that we should accept the quickness of modern era and get along with that, because the life's speed is increasing. Plus, most of the people and agencies pay attention to doing duties quickly, and do not take care about quality of that. In a nutshell, In fact, there are multiplicity of other factors supplementing the aforementioned statements, which could be alluded, but are not embraced due to the dearth of time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
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Suggestion: were
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, hence, if, really, so, thus, apart from, i guess, in fact, no doubt, such as, you know, first of all, in other words, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2325.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 483.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81366459627 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60361824723 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521739130435 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 727.2 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.8867930621 48.9658058833 157% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.368421053 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4210526316 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.31578947368 5.45110844103 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.102696159645 0.236089414692 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0314394304631 0.076458572812 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0298907265753 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.064539728188 0.150856017488 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0220263216308 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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