Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In today's world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Even though there is a widely held notion that for a successful business, individuals should be totally cautious in their decisions and avoid making mistakes by working slowly, I subscribe to the view that taking risks is necessary to achieve a prosperous business. My reasons of support are provided as the following.
First of all, the key to success in today's world is innovative ideas, and one should make sure to bring a brilliant concept into practice as soon as possible before anyone else does it prior to them. For instance, in our start-up company, we had an idea which would make it possible for store owners to supervise their workers remotely by their smartphones. We dedicated a very long time to build the device perfectly and remove all the deficiencies before introducing the product and represent it as our own brand. However, another company came up with the same idea and earned the brand for itself, and we needed to pay them to utilize the device in our company's package. I believe that if we had established the equipment as our own with a basic version quickly and then gradually had reformed it, we would have gained much more profit since we wouldn't have to pay the other company.
Secondly, there is always uncertainty about whether a product will attract sufficient customers or not. In order to overcome this uncertainty, a business should try different ideas and items until one of them eventually result in success. This cannot be achieved if the company's managers aren't willing to take significant risks and proceed with the projects as quickly as possible. For example, we know that Tomas Edison's research team used to try too many substances rapidly instead of analyzing each combination of materials to discover new elements for their inventions. Many believe that the high speed of Edison's projects was the cause of his numerous successful discoveries.
In conclusion, I believe that due to the sever competitions of multiple facilities to bring their ideas into the real world applications before anybody else, and the fact that wide variety of products must be tested until one of them attracts the customers, taking risky choices and working quickly bring about a more prosperous business.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, for example, for instance, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1872.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03225806452 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68903749509 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588709677419 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 594.9 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.9226597685 48.9658058833 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.0 100.406767564 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.6153846154 20.6045352989 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.84615384615 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116929759468 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0400679142137 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0388740052417 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0759741251164 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0375752151809 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 11.7677419355 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.49 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.52 8.01818996416 119% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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