Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In civilized and industrialized societies, job has been always among primary concerns of human beings’ lives. Today it is axiomatic that, youth usually elapse the longer part of their life working. A plethora of people possess the conviction that it is better for children to have vocations that resemble the jobs of their parents, whereas others might hold exactly the opposite view. Whether one agrees or disagrees with it depends on the lens through which one is looking. I firmly am approval with the former conviction instead of the later one. In what follows, I am going to aptly delve into the most outstanding reasons to advocate my viewpoint.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that, in such a circumstance, they can make further progress than their peer group, because they use their parents’ work experience and expertise. It is undeniable that whoever has job similar to his parents’ job will have more prosperous life than those who have not this situation. It should be stressed that having experience is the one of the key factors in finding a job. Therefore, the chances of these children can intensify to land a profitable vocation in near future. The more time elapses, the more they realize that having experiment is very significant in the modern era. In my own experience, the father of one of my friends was a pilot, and so my friend became pilot like his father. Consequently, he became one of the youngest and most successful pilots in his country by using his father’s assistance and experiment. He would not have become the youngest pilot in his country had he not used his father’s experience.
Another equally noteworthy point supporting this opinion is that they are not worried about finding a job, because they usually work at their parents’ workspace or they are introduced to another workspace by ordering their parents. Therefore, it can open door to a lot of opportunities to obtain work easily. On the other hand, those who do not own this situation and condition will have a lot of stress to get a job and deal with numerous problems in obtaining a job. A recent study conducted by scientists of university of Virginia on successful individuals revealed that 80 percent of them who had a comparable vocation to a job of their parents and worked in their parents’ workspace from a young era.
To put in briefly, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that having a job similar to the parents’ job not only can cause to acquire useful experiences, but can also reduce the stress of finding a vocation. However, a paramount issue that must be mentioned is that this cannot be used as a prescription for everybody and some counterexamples might exist. As a result, I suggest conducting more surveys and studies to answer this question more precisely.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 231, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'jobbed'.
Suggestion: jobbed
...tise. It is undeniable that whoever has job similar to his parents' job will h...
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Line 4, column 147, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'acquiring'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: acquiring
...he parents' job not only can cause to acquire useful experiences, but can also reduce...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, consequently, first, however, if, look, so, therefore, whereas, in brief, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2378.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 480.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95416666667 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9623066041 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522916666667 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 754.2 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.3533260481 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.238095238 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8571428571 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.90476190476 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.324300317857 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0877455162021 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0836175302636 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199951313861 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.047563170378 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 86.8835125448 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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