Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, due to the latest advance of technology, notably the internet, we can have access to the latest news readily. There are thousands, or even more events, occurring all around the globe every day, and one can access them easily, in a blink of an eye. Although some people argue that we have to follow every news and being up to dated, I personally believe keeping up with all of the events is a waste of time. Simply because due to the abundance of events, we can't focus on all of them, and following the latest events, may result on our manner.
To begin with, every hour, something happens somewhere in the world, keeping up with all of those event requires sheer focus and concentration. In fact, due to the latest instability in most of the Asian countries, there is always something happening; if we try to focus, to catch up with those events, we have to devote a great amount of energy and time on them, which may causes forgetting about our own primary daily problems. As an example, I used to follow the latest news about the ongoing wars in Syria, I used to check Syria's map every hour, every day. What I did induced a reduction in my marks, at the university; Simply because I neglected studying and forgot my primary goals. Thus, in my personal opinion, I believe if try to follow the innumerable events, all around the world, we may neglect our casual and more important tasks.
Moreover, following every event, especially sad and tragic ones, will affect our own manner, unconsciously. We are human beings, we get sad when one's in trouble; this is pretty common sense and is essential for morals. However, is it really necessary to get sad for those who we can't really help? If we let all those events, which we are not responsible for, nor can do anything about, affect our lives, we simply have dug our own grave. In fact, in long terms, if we do so, depressions is pretty expectable, which will result in a bad life, not only for ourselves, but also for our friends and family, who we interact with daily. Therefore, I believe catching up with whatever event that happens somewhere in the world, may cause serious harm on our manner, undeliberately.
All in all, to conclude with, with the easy access to technology, we can reach the latest news and updates on events, far from us. However, if try to keep up with all of them, we may forget about our own goals, or we may just face severe emotional effects.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 380, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...d, I personally believe keeping up with all of the events is a waste of time. Simply becau...
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Line 1, column 468, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ause due to the abundance of events, we cant focus on all of them, and following the...
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Line 5, column 93, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this event' or 'those events'?
Suggestion: this event; those events
...re in the world, keeping up with all of those event requires sheer focus and concentration....
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Line 5, column 702, Rule ID: PERSONAL_OPINION_FRIENDSHIP[1]
Message: Use simply 'opinion'.
Suggestion: opinion
...nd forgot my primary goals. Thus, in my personal opinion, I believe if try to follow the innumer...
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Line 9, column 280, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...y necessary to get sad for those who we cant really help? If we let all those events...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, really, so, therefore, thus, in fact, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2012.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 438.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59360730594 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48768049435 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48401826484 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 639.9 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 42.8635075188 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.352941176 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7647058824 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.29411764706 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.122188944358 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0494922755278 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0369361532238 0.0737576698707 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0819476621907 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0233363340001 0.0645574589148 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.64 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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