Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In civilized and industrialized societies, human beings have always strived to improve their standard living and bring more convenience to their day-to-day lives. Today, it is axiomatic that people usually elapse the longer part of their life knowing about news that are occurring around the world. A plethora people possess the conviction that knowing about events happening around world is important for any person, whereas others hold exactly the opposite view. I firmly endorse the first conviction instead of the later one. In what follows, I am going to aptly delve into the most outstanding reasons to advocate my point of view.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that in the world we live in, every things are changing and the criteria on which assessment are based have been altered. Therefore, it is undeniable that people should know about these events altered for the advancement of life. In fact, whoever has been a lot of information about the events happened around the world will is able to better choose for her or his future opportunities. For example, in recent decade, the amount of dollars highly increase in my country and those who had updated information about economical and political issues benefited from this situation and became rich people.
Another equally noteworthy point supporting this opinion is that nowadays one of the events that is occurring is related to technology advancement, which is progressing with incredible growth pace. It should be stressed that if we know about this and adapted with it, we will have more comfortable life by use of the up-to-minute technology. In my own experience, my parents resist to update themselves with this technology advancement and do not obtain the information about it for using it in their lives. For this reason, they deal with the problems in the use of electronic devices such as mobile and computer. So, it can give rise to the reduction of self-esteem and self-satisfaction. Consequently, they would have been satisfied had they used the updated technologies.
To put it in briefly, all enumerated reasons lead us to the conclusion that knowing about events happening around the world can be useful for one's opportunities of future and may have positive impact on one's life. However, a paramount issue that must be mentioned is that this can not be used for everybody and some counterexamples might exist, which are not mentioned above. As a result, I suggest conducting more surveys and studies to answer this question more precisely.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 376, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'resist updating'.
Suggestion: resist updating
...ology. In my own experience, my parents resist to update themselves with this technology advance...
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Line 13, column 143, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ning around the world can be useful for ones opportunities of future and may have po...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
briefly, consequently, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, whereas, for example, in brief, in fact, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2137.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 416.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13701923077 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85249747833 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540865384615 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 680.4 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.3195467285 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.722222222 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1111111111 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.88888888889 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207395113017 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0667792524139 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0592014596804 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129518658895 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00854685821694 0.0645574589148 13% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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