Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
With the advent and improvements of technology, gaining information about what is happening around, as well as on the other side of the universe is very easy. Some people believe that we should mind our own business. They might just prefer to listen to local news and do not care for other worldwide news. However, I am of the opinion that people should be aware of what is occurring around the world. I feel this because of two reasons: people can help each other and learn from similar experiences. I will explore these reasons in the following essay.
First, people can help each other around the world. People are sympathetic towards other human beings by nature. The main parts of human characteristics are built related to society and in relation with others. One of the distinctive hallmarks that differentiate people from animals, is their desire to communicate. Some dictator leaders claim that their people can survive and be prosperous without any need to contact other people. Despite this claim, I believe that a healthy society requires to get in touch with others around the world. For example, recently a disastrous earthquake happened in one of the Thailand’s Islands. Many people got killed. Thanks to the world-wide news many people found out about the earthquake and donated many things to the country. By people’s assistance, many of the financial and emotional predicaments of the people got alleviated. Furthermore, those who helped felt a lot happy too.
In addition to helping, it helps people learn from similar experiences. No country has a unique history. When you search the political history and the events in different countries, you find out that they are similar in many aspects. Therefore, people can take advantage of the experiences that others have had. By a way of example, I recall that a huge violation of law happened in one country during the election. News covered all the details and you could see that the reporters and experts were discussing the reasons of the cheating on the election every day. This incident had a very large impact in my country during the election. People who were worried that the same thing might happen here too seriously asked the government to be careful during the election. I think, if it were not for the news coverage, we would not have had that lawful election.
In conclusion, and on the basis of the aforementioned agreements, I would like to reiterate that I think that It is very crucial to know about the news around the world. I feel this because people can assist each other and because they can learn from experiences of the people around the world.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 496, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'getting'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: getting
...believe that a healthy society requires to get in touch with others around the world. ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, well, for example, i feel, i think, in addition, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2203.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 448.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91741071429 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69940465936 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495535714286 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 687.6 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.6955665229 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.6785714286 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.35714285714 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13750095158 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.037869179467 0.076458572812 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0433405103634 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0999620279448 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0326869592946 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.96 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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