Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Events that happen around the world have a significant impact on our daily life. These are the occurrences that shape our lives. Some people believe that it is important to know about events happening around the world while others disagree. In my view, it is vital to know about occurrences around ourselves for two important reasons.
First is that knowing events that allow us to up-to-date with information, which builds up our knowledge. If we do not familiar with events around us, we may not able to cope up with the world. For example, I always read newspapers, watching TV news to flooded myself with the information. When I read through the newspaper, I familiar with many sections like world business news, cultural news, technology and new innovation of various arts and science field. These various genres of information make me more knowledgeable. Sometimes in the feature article, the newspaper provides emerging faces in the world who make the world better by using their newly developed technology, urban planning techniques. Recently, I was encountered with an emerging face who made an effective plan for the betterment of Australian transport system. As you can see, knowing events around the world made me more up-to-date with information.
Second, you won't be suffered if you get connected with the current events. For instance, a few months ago my country underwent political turmoil. So, many of the opposition parties were tried to lessen the activity of the state by imposing strike. In a day of a strike, no private transport systems like buses or private vehicles are available. So, the citizen has to rely on public transportation like trains, subways. I had a TOEFL test on 4th October. Few days before the October 4, one of the largest opposition party called upon a state strike. And I knew it from live TV news. After knowing that, I immediately purchased a train ticket to travel in the day of 4th October. As a result, I won't suffer from the strike and easily reached my destination. This experience taught me that if I hadn't connected with upcoming events throw TV news, I would fall into great trouble.
In conclusion, it is vital to know that what happens around you.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'innovation'.
Suggestion: innovation
...ess news, cultural news, technology and new innovation of various arts and science field. Thes...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hadn't
...on. This experience taught me that if I hadnt connected with upcoming events throw TV...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, second, so, while, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1841.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 373.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93565683646 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74204942297 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584450402145 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 569.7 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.5196200249 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.7083333333 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5416666667 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.45833333333 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22098632605 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0610236065114 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0749823518755 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154828086777 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0730898087533 0.0645574589148 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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