Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
That today knowing news around the world profoundly is a principal. A question which is highly debatable is, whether people need to know news from other countries. Although some people strongly believe that people have to focus on their city news. Nevertheless, I believe that it is crucial to know about all the events happening around the world. The following reasons would elaborate on the thesis.
First of all, one of the persuasive reasons that authenticate the thesis is that people can receive vital information from the news to decide about their next step in their life. It would not be too great an exaggeration to say that these days, due to complex business and economic, many aspects of the economy tie to other condition which can have a negative or positive effect. In fact, all the companies depend on together and people have to follow the world news to get suitable information for their decision. For instance, my family decided to buy a home in Turkey so that they travel there, and spend a large amount of money to stay in this country for two months. Unfortunately, they could not buy a home because the price of the home rises up due to the price of the dollars. If they followed the news, when they decided to live in Turkey, they could analyze all aspect of this decision. There are no doubt many more examples, but this is one real story that clearly shows the effect of knowing news on the person's life.
In addition, traveling around the world is very expensive but TV and global news can give us adequate information about the world. Broadly speaking, since the economic situation of some people are going down, they cannot improve their knowledge about the culture of other countries To clarify, not only knowing news of other countries help the travel, but also it gives people a range of view about a specific country which people decide to live or study there. For instance, my friends wanted to go to Azerbaijan to attend university, but she did not have enough information about this country. On the other hand, she has a limit budget, but after getting some valuable information about this country she excited and she realized that her decision is right. All in all, the role of the news that play in helping people is enormous.
In conclusion, although there are many who believe that people do not need to get information about other cities or countries. I disagree. I think knowing the information and news about the economic world help us to improve our lives. I strongly believe that the news from around the world gives us opportunities to receive valuable information about the culture and history of other countries.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...need to know news from other countries. Although some people strongly believe that peopl...
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Suggestion: persons'; person's
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...mic world help us to improve our lives. I strongly believe that the news from aro...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, nevertheless, so, then, broadly speaking, for instance, i think, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, no doubt, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2209.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 462.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78138528139 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49734121468 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.458874458874 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 697.5 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.9266210533 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.45 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.25 5.45110844103 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159052514245 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0610952391633 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0603428665021 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117060130307 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0312867571179 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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