Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
It goes without saying that in this sophisticated and bustling world, every day various types of events occur which someone is horrible and someone is pleasant. There has been a controversial debate among many people about the very notion whether it is significant to be aware of events happening around the world. In my point of view, although it may seem knowing about what occurs in our world is beneficial; this may cause some adverse effects on human beings. The reasons to substantiate my viewpoint are elaborated upon hereunder.
First, it may waste people's time that could have spent on other daily tasks, instead. Time is the most valuable currency that human beings have and how they opt to spend this treasure plays a major role in their lives. Hearing world news in the morning, especially terrible news, can entirely preoccupy people. Therefore, they would think about it during the day or speak with others about this disaster, instead of concentrating on their job or study. To illustrate this point one only needs refer to when I heard the news of a mosque in Christchurch, I thought and spoke about it for a whole week, besides I was searching on the internet to know more so the number of hours that I studied was drastically decreased.
Second, it may cause unnecessary distress leading to health problems. people are completely affected by what they see or hear in their surroundings, therefore hearing bad news makes them anxious or nervous and the consequence of stress and bad feeling is some health problems. Takes a personal experience as an example, one day my twelve-year-old son see the news of a local war in an African country and he was shocked and at night he cried and shouted.
To sum up, based on all argumentations stated above, one can logically draw the consequence that listening to world news not only is a time-wasting job but also makes people nervous and anxious which is very harmful to their health.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: People
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, may, second, so, therefore, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1614.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 334.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83233532934 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72298434927 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.59880239521 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 492.3 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.557714412 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.153846154 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6923076923 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.23076923077 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129209084225 0.236089414692 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0440468420066 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.042326871809 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0699433194754 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0487772279222 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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