Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Most advertisements make products seem much better then they really are.
With the advances in Information Technology, people are facing many challenges they need to be able to fully understand them and make well-informed decisions. One such significant issue is modern advertisements companies use to promote their products. The media play an important role as they can encourage people to buy a special product or can discourage them from spending money. In my opinion, advertisement agencies use a variety of techniques and approaches to make a product seem valuable and effective than it is in reality. This essay will discuss this matter.
First of all, as humans are entering a new modern era, they will confront many different situations in which they need to decide properly and accurately. In today's world, thanks to the advances in technology and in particular information flow, people see a lot of product advertisements which attempt to make people believe they need a certain and that they should spend money to obtain that. Companies utilize many methods to persuade people to buy their products, so they make huge profit. They make million-dollar contracts with special agencies to promote what they produce, and these agencies use many visualization and sound and image techniques to fulfill their job. But, sometimes these products are not worthwhile and they are just not good and productive enough to satisfy customers. The only purpose of companies is to sell and make huge amount of money. For example, recently I bought an Apple Iphone which was actually expensive, but I just wanted to have it because I was deceived by false advertisements that this smartphone is the best product ever produced and that it works perfectly fast. After a while, my phone started to crash and after some research I found out that the latest operating system of Apple has faults.
In addition, the best way to promote a product is to tell the truth about its capabilities and features. Using this approach, companies can ensure consumers are willing to spend money to buy that product. Moreover, manufacturers should improve the quality of their products, so when people buy them they feel quite happy about their purchase and do not feel disappointed because they were simply deceived to spend money to make companies richer. This is undoubtedly a better approach and companies will grow and last longer. For example, there were some incidents with some cars of a famous brand a couple of years ago which caused the engine to explode. The managers of that company first apologized to people and then change their advertising approaches and since then, they have improved their cars and announce the true capabilities of those products.
In conclusion, advertisements play a vital role in today's world as they can encourage people to buy a certain product by promoting it. However, false announcement and advertisements about a product will not only make people feel bad about their purchase, but they may also lose their trust in the companies. In my opinion, the best approach for companies is to advertise their products by indicating their true abilities which can encourage people to but them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 222, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...ssue is modern advertisements companies use to promote their products. The media pl...
^^^
Line 3, column 75, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...ng a new modern era, they will confront many different situations in which they need to decide...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 603, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[2]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun visualization seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much visualization', 'a good deal of visualization'.
Suggestion: much visualization; a good deal of visualization
...at they produce, and these agencies use many visualization and sound and image techniques to fulfi...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, well, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in particular, first of all, in my opinion, to tell the truth
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2623.0 1977.66487455 133% => OK
No of words: 515.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0932038835 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.763781212 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81172423869 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477669902913 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 825.3 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.9637160009 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.227272727 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4090909091 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.22727272727 5.45110844103 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200724748943 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0659236915556 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.037272571633 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141000878501 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0158939200191 0.0645574589148 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 86.8835125448 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.