Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Computer games is become widespread and popular to children now-a-days. Children has very keenness to play computer game. Some people believe that children should not be allowed to play computer games as it wastes huge amount of time. Others disagree. In my view, children should not be allowed to play computer games because of following reasons.
First, it creates addiction, which is bad for children. Playing games creates addiction on children and they do not concentrate on study. For example, my niece, who is lovely 6 year old girl. She has much attraction towards computer games and asked me very often to give her a chance to play games in my computer. Since I love my cute nice, I often gave her my computer. But the problem I found when I came to know that her school results decreasing day by day. So, I investigate what was the cause of her low grade in school. I found that she became inured to computer games and wasted huge amount in a days. As a result, she had no time left for studying. Moreover, it becomes her addiction and off-course a bad addiction. And we know addiction is bad for children. As a result, this addiction affect her concentration so she do not able to concentrate on study. As she did not study well, she might not able to do well in exam. That is the reason why she got poor mark in the examination. As you see from my example that playing computer games is bad for children.
Second, games in computer affect the children brain badly. For instance, research has been showed that exposure to long term computer games affect the grey matter of their brain. Their sleep cycle can be disturbed. If they do not sleep well then it is very likely that children brain can be drastically affected.
However, children should busy with other creative activity rather than playing game on computer. For example, if the children will involve in art work, matching puzzle or solving cubicle would be very good for them. These kind of activity provides them pleasure with best use of time. When children busy with art work they became more proactive.
In conclusion, playing games on computer is not only makes them addicted but also it affects their brain. So, we should not allowed the children to expose to computer games.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, then, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, as a result, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1870.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71032745592 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46713578971 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.496221662469 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 573.3 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.9865135963 48.9658058833 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 64.4827586207 100.406767564 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.6896551724 20.6045352989 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.79310344828 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 3.85842293907 389% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.348050039087 0.236089414692 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101923401566 0.076458572812 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100101593373 0.0737576698707 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224559515685 0.150856017488 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0989656626916 0.0645574589148 153% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.6 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.2 58.1214874552 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 10.1575268817 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 9.45 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.87 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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