The extended family is less important now than it was in the past
A family is the most important element to build a society. It is the building block of a society. There are two types of family are predominantly discussed; nuclear family and extended family. Some people believe that the extended family, comprised of grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles, is less important now than it was in the past. Others disagree. In my view, the extended family is instrumental also at present for the following reasons.
First, the life of nowadays becomes robotic. By saying robotic I mean to say that we are now extremely busy with our day to work schedule. And we do not have enough time to live a life without our working office. The extended family plays a significant role to lessen this robotic life. For example, when you have more family members in your family, you are more likely to expose with them. You can able to gossip, outing with them. In my family, we have an uncle, aunty, and grandparents. Since I have an uncle and aunty, so I also have their children. So, whenever I came from office work, I would have exhausted. After a hectic life, I need to relax. And the extended family come here to soothe my all anxiety and languors. When I talked and played with my cousin's sister and brother, I become revive again. As you can see, if I had not enough family members in my family, then I would not able to become fresh after a hectic day.
Second, children develop more emotional maturity when they are raised in the extended family. For example, I was born and brought up in an extended family. So, I can make a quick decision about any critical situation. Once, my father had a terrible road accident. After this accident, some of the people who found my father on road, called over the phone to contact me. I was when I listened to that news over the phone. I was 19 years old at that time but I quickly make a decision and informed my uncle. Then, my uncle immediately contacts with those people and spot my father immediately to hospitals. This type of mature decision making in a critical situation is not possible in nuclear families children. In fact, I can able to make this because previously I was exposed to a similar situation when my grandmother passed away. So, this gives me an experience that builds maturity. This clearly illustrates that the necessity of the extended family.
In conclusion, the extended family is significant even today because not only it gives us more lively life but also does develop the maturity of young children. So, we should live in an extended family.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, then, for example, i mean, in conclusion, in fact, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2113.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 452.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67477876106 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53779771089 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495575221239 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 702.9 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6003584229 155% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.2995620402 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 66.03125 100.406767564 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.125 20.6045352989 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.96875 5.45110844103 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242638135922 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0571958847645 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0909780463058 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184771022211 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.164980705263 0.0645574589148 256% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.6 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.1575268817 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.21 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.16 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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