Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Computer games have become widespread and popular among children nowadays. Children have very keenness to play the computer game. Some people believe that children should not be allowed to play computer games as it wastes the huge amount of time. Others disagree. In my view, children should not be allowed to play computer games because of the following reasons.
First, it creates addiction, which is bad for children. Playing games creates addiction on children and they do not concentrate on study. For example, my niece who is a lovely 6-year-old. She has much attraction towards computer games and asked me very often to give her a chance to play games in my computer. Since I love my cute nice, I often gave her my computer. But the problem I found when I came to know that her school results decreasing day by day. So, I investigate what was the cause of her low grade at school. I found that she became inured to computer games and wasted a huge amount of time in a day. As a result, she had no time left for studying. Moreover, it becomes her addiction and off-course a bad addiction. And we know that addiction is bad for children. As a result, this addiction affects her concentration so she is not able to concentrate on study. As she did not study well, she might not able to do well in the exam. That is the reason why she got the poor mark in the examination. As you see from my example that playing computer games is bad for children.
Second, games in computer affect the children brain badly. For instance, research has been showed that exposure to long-term computer games affects the grey matter of their brain. Their sleep cycle can be disturbed. If they do not sleep well then it is very likely that children brain can be drastically affected.
However, children should busy with other creative activity rather than playing the game on the computer. For example, if the children will involve in artwork, matching puzzle or solving cubicle would be very good for them. These kinds of activity provide them pleasure with the best use of time. When children busy with artwork they became more proactive.
In conclusion, playing games on the computer is not only makes them addicted but also it affects their brain. So, we should not be allowed the children to expose to computer games.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, then, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1914.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71428571429 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48035304525 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477832512315 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 589.5 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.516577624 48.9658058833 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 66.0 100.406767564 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.0 20.6045352989 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.48275862069 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 3.85842293907 389% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.350618658303 0.236089414692 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102282511168 0.076458572812 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100596833481 0.0737576698707 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227979178106 0.150856017488 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0946516194924 0.0645574589148 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.8 11.7677419355 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.45 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.01 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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