Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In contemporary society, people have witnessed huge social changes in our daily life. As the generations evolve, changes in a few things become prominent. What we used to consider valuable yesterday may not carry the same value today. However, some might give the same respect to extended families, while some insist that extended families have become less important in today's world. As far as I am concerned, I agree with the latter.
To start with, in this fast track world, people are getting busier every day in their world and most often they move to different cities to pursue their careers. Hence they do not have time to remember their extended family members. Everyone has hardly time for their uncle, aunt, or cousins. It's fortunate for those who are living in the same city or town. They can always plan out something like weekly dinner or family get together, but if they do not live in the same city or country then it would be difficult for all to mingle and spend some special moments with their extended family. My family is a convincing example of this, my family and my grandparents, we share the same colony whereas, my aunts and uncles settle in a different state so I hardly meet my aunts and uncles. It's been seven years that I did not see them since nobody cares to meet because everybody is occupied with their private world. It is unlikely to see such a situation in the past. This example illustrates a change in our present-day society.
secondly, there's no enough human value in today's generation unlike people in the past. People just think about themselves. they care less about others even if it's their cousins, uncle, or aunt. For instance, few of my friends have never met their uncles or aunts and they are least willing to see them in the future too. I believe it's sole because of changing worlds and lost of humanity. People becoming self-centered. Surveys by the researcher have revealed that sixty percent of students don't remember their uncles or aunt's name.
In conclusion, I believe that due to the evolution of this modern world, people being are self-centered and care more about themselves, therefore, we get to see less importance of extended family.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, whereas, while, for instance, in conclusion, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1828.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 380.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81052631579 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47252352389 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560526315789 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 580.5 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 54.9333367601 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.0909090909 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2727272727 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.77272727273 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.134777874669 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0380651780737 0.076458572812 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0360300229074 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0817683231366 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0239980596567 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.32 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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