Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now.
There is no shadow of doubt on the fact that wellknown people have been facing lots of difficulties during their work years. As a word of wisdom which says that evry thing comes with its cost; celeberities lives are no exception. Plenthy of people holds the conviction that Famous community do not deserve thss right to have more privacy; whereas others hold exactly the oppsite point of view. Ergo, when it comes to my stance, by wheighing up the pros and cons, I firsmly endorse the first conviction. I will investigate the reasons substantiating my viewpoint in the following essay.
The first reason to be mentioned is that renown people from the begining,were aware of the hardships of their major, and alongside its consequenses they chose to do it. A plethora of people's joy and entertaining are to follow celebrities private lives or their daily habits and rituals. However, some people argues thet they deserve to have a simple lives like other people, but I invalidate this believe by the fact that one aspect of their job is to be like this, accordingly they are making money by being observed by society all the time.
Alongside the elaborated reason above, another equally worthy point is that most of the time celebrities want to open their lives for public. By this action, they become more and more famause every they, which would result to more fame and therefore, more mony for them. However, plenty of people states that it is nort moral and their kids and spouse's, also have the right to feel free and live normally; but, I tae the celebrities side at this situation, , because they are not able to work forever and thereby, make money. As a result, they must do what ever they can do to garrantte their future.
all in all, taking all the reasons and points into account, my sound belief is that celebrities do not need to have more privacy; because in this way they may lose their gross income. Furth
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, whereas, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1591.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 337.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72106824926 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4684345255 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.581602373887 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.3344858605 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.384615385 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9230769231 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.92307692308 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216399873102 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0711992944412 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0640251746859 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133101745189 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0214138260063 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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