Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Since time immemorial government’s decisions has played a prominent role in each society's success. Authorities are in quest of addressing their people's needs by allocating budgets to different spheres. A controversial question, which is often raised regarding this idea, is whether governments should invest more money on art domains or athletic domains. From my perspective, it is a more prudent course of action for governments to spend more money in art. In the following paragraphs, I will substantiate my viewpoint.
The first vital point to bear in mind is that art is the greatest means of mind's nourishment, which is as important as physical nourishment. Besides, according to Maslow's hierarchy of needs, people are more seeking to pacify their high-level's needs, which are almost mental needs. By allocating more budget to improve art spheres in the country, people can seize this golden opportunity to be more in the exposure of every shapes of art, which helps them to be more mentally satisfied. For instance, by building more theatres, people can see more dramas which are based on sophisticated plays that make people think about their existence goal, and the arbitrary nature of their existence, also they will seek the answer of these essential question in themselves and eventually this whole process ends up being a better person as they know they are ephemeral and nothing is permanent.
The second noteworthy reason is that people possess a hectic life style and they work from down to dust to survive current economic climate. As a result, they are always plagued with an elevated stress level and an inordinate amount of pressure. Art is the best form of escapism upon which they can relieve their stress and tension and unwind. Therefore, the more artistic facilities become available, the more they will be flooded with the sense of relief. Moreover, all kinds of art, recruit both hemispheres of one's mind, as a result, by investing on art era, people's innovation will be cultivated which is an immense asset, because by being more creative, they can find solution in the case, problems pop up in their personal lives, so they can tackle their problem at remarkable ease.
To wrap it up, based on the aforementioned grounds, one can drew a conclusion that dedicating more budget to art is beneficial in many ways. First, people can enlist art's helping hand to nourish their mind. Second, art assist people to overcome their tensions. It is highly recommended for authorities to set the stage for developing art infrastructures.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 515, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...nds of art, recruit both hemispheres of ones mind, as a result, by investing on art ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, if, moreover, regarding, second, so, therefore, for instance, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2156.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13333333333 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84357393053 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578571428571 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 662.4 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 87.0417985301 48.9658058833 178% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.777777778 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.27777777778 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.122816197576 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0459274224982 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0481478208326 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0898351204052 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0456438560266 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.4 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 86.8835125448 142% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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