It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job
Throughout history, having specified jobs plays a pivotal role in people’s lives. That is to say, having jabs helps people to be autonomous in terms of economic and social issues. Much breath and ink are extended in arguing about takings jobs that look like their ancestors’ work or different from them. When it comes to me, it is my firm conviction that, although having a job that resembles the ancestors one has its comfortable, taking different jobs is better for the young generation. There are some reasons to advocate this viewpoint, two of which will be aptly explored in the following essay.
First and foremost, choosing different jobs helps children to improve their creativity. To clarify more, by imitating parents’ jobs, children get used to occupying their parents' jobs without taking any risks to discover new aspects of their jobs. On the other hand, taking different jobs aim youngsters to detect their business weakness and empower them independently, and as a result, they have to go to the economic competition with other companies to survive. Accordingly, the modern era requires having a new idea and being creative to succeed in the business. For example, I can remember that when I want to enter university, I choose different educational fields from my parents major. My field of study was computer science, yet my parents’ filed was medicine. As time went by, my parent told me that it had better to me to become an employee in the government office, but I decided to take risks by doing my business. I detected that if I want to be prosperous in technology marketing, I have to be an inventor. In other words, I invent new software in the advertising field, which helped me to be a success in business competition. Had I heard my parents' advice, I would not have been successful in my field by taking risks and being creative.
Another reason which is worthwhile to mention is that taking different jobs helps children to augment their sense of responsibility. To explain more, when adolescence tries to follow their parents' jobs, they depend on their parents’ thought and attempt, so they could not be independents in terms of their assignments. When people continue their parents' jobs, their forefathers dictated their advice for children, and thereby, children rely on their parents to help in their life to be successful in their jobs. In this case, children cannot be successful in being independent and taking responsibility for their assignments, leads to having problems in their future lives. Also, by taking different jobs, children could communicate with many people, and this interaction reinforces their sense of responsibility.
In summary of what has been illustrated and discussed in detail, it is foregoing the conclusion that taking different jobs is better for children's future lives than pursuing their parents’ work. The fact that exploring a new area of jobs helps children be independents in their lives, along it helps to be creative, are the reasons that strengthen my claim.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, if, look, so, then, while, for example, in summary, as a result, in other words, on the other hand, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2544.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 502.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06772908367 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7334296765 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86851759627 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494023904382 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 763.2 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.0907029473 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.636363636 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8181818182 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.59090909091 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.428001861907 0.236089414692 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140556557208 0.076458572812 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115678567214 0.0737576698707 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.300384204145 0.150856017488 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0345132967227 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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