Many people visit museums when they travel to new places. Why do you think people visit museums? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Every country in the world has museums where they record their most valuable things, such as a king's crown, a precious rock, or the first automobile purchased in the area. Curious, many people want to know more about past events of their own nations or the world. People visit museums to educate themselves and to spend quality time.
First, museum are extremely educative, and that is why people visit them. Many human beings value knowledge, so they embrace any opportunity that will allow them to gain it. Monuments in museums give people an idea about how people have lived in the past. Thus, those who visit museums get incredulous insight about the past, which enhances their overall education. For example, I went to a museum in Bukavu, and I saw a ring that the king of my tribe used to wear. This ring was known to possess some magical power, and nobody was allowed to touch it; otherwise, they would die. My younger brother who accompanied me touched it and put it on his finger, but nothing happened. Due to my experience in the museum, I realized that people from older generation had a lot of superstitions.
Second, visiting a museum is very fun and people are eager to go to museum to have quality time. There are so many things that someone may discover in museums that can be so interesting to the point that he or she will not feel like leaving the place. For instance, two years ego I visited the Congolese geological museum. I saw the magnite, petrol at a natural state, pure gold for the first time. As I was studying chemistry, I stood amazed in the room till I realized that I was 3 hours away from the time I had to go back because I was engaged. It was the best leisure time I ever had in my life.
In conclusion, people visit museums to learn more about the past and to spend a great leisure time. People have the opportunity to learn about misconceptions of older generation in museum. Moreover, going to museums makes people like they don't want to live. Everybody should endeavor to visit museum because of the great benefit they provide.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, moreover, second, so, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1702.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.5752688172 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44076547587 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551075268817 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.2661568455 48.9658058833 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 81.0476190476 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7142857143 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.325814198128 0.236089414692 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115496202766 0.076458572812 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0882835676144 0.0737576698707 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223369932234 0.150856017488 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0546736494255 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.99 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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