In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a good idea? Support your opinion by using specific reasons and details.
There is a famous Persian proverb which says: “working is a self-perpetuating asset.” According to this proverb, working is a priceless experience for everyone. Whit this in mind, I subscribe the idea that teenagers should have jobs while they are in high school for many reasons. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss two significant of them that is, preparing for the future and economic issues.
First of all, in today’s modern world, job requirements are changed and need more experience and skill related to the specific job. Living in the world with the galloping progress, young people need to learn skills in their early stages of their life so that they gain invaluable experiences in their future career. Doing thought-provoking jobs apart from the education result in broadening student’s mind. By doing this, teenagers may have multi-dimensional characteristic and do not spend their priceless time for such inappropriate activities as smoking, roaming, to name but two.
Secondly, there is a fact that money plays a crucial role in the life. Some students by working alongside their study can help their poor parent to live life more comfortable. Additionally, young people who have jobs while they are in school, learn how to earn money along with their lessons in the school. Also, it is undeniable fact that presence of youth in the society help improvement of the economy of the country. These days, the economic recession is commonplace in a great number of countries.
In conclusion, with taking into account all above-mentioned points and other reasons, participating young people in the society as working people and future adults help progress in the economy of the country and also, is a stepping-stone for the students to prepare for their desired career in the future.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, apart from, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1532.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 293.0 407.700716846 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22866894198 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12488604785 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.58361774744 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 463.5 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.5480129679 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.846153846 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5384615385 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.30769230769 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148913692934 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0559020895977 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0655187671703 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.085006085293 0.150856017488 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0526498994105 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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