Some parents forbid young children from owning smartphones (cell phones with Internet
access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in
touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?
Most of our parents agree that smartphones with internet access are essential gadgets for keeping a link between children and parents whereas some prevent their children from having them. In today's growing society and increasing number of technological items, it is difficult to deprive children from having a cellphone.
Firstly, almost everything around us is computerized. From traditional classrooms with black/white boards to projecting screens, from paper assignments to printed research work from computer and printers. Everything around us is somewhat getting computerized. For example, when i was in school, i studied from textbooks and our teachers used to teach us using chalkboard for writing down lessons. This was only in practice until i was in grade 8. After that the chalkboards were transformed into whiteboards with markers until grade 12th. Finally, projection screens are in practice in colleges and universities. And most of our assignments are from online researches that our teachers encourage us to do. And technology is greatly impacting our lives to an extend that i doubt that the 3rd generation will even how how paper looks like. Since everything is being done on computers these days, the tablets will soon replace papers and notebooks will replace our textbooks for class. Therefore, why keep only one gadget away from children when they have exposure to other electronics.
Secondly, children go to school everyday, normally for 8 hours away from parents. If a parent needs to contact them, they either have to call the administration office and wait on call for long periods of time. Also, if a child is going for outing or for group study, then again parents will not be able to get in touch with them quickly.For example, when i was in grade 10, i did not own any cell phone and i was out with my friends, that day i was stuck in traffic and could not reach home in time. My mother was extremely worried until i was able to call her from my friend's phone. Once she knew i was ok then she was relaxed and immediately thought of buying a smartphone for me too.
Lastly, if children are not provided with cellphone they are not able to socialize better. That is texting, calling their friends, facebooking and will not be able to get intouch with their class teachers when they need help in assignment. Also, the smartphones come with additional features such as dictionary that aids in the learning of a student.So, i agree that students should have cell phones however, there should also be restriction placed on its usage so that children do need abuse the freedom of owning a cellphone because sometimes they often play too many games and talk to their friends for hours that is a waste of time.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, look, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, whereas, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2281.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 463.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92656587473 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7086868329 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548596112311 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 679.5 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 79.4636784353 48.9658058833 162% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.619047619 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0476190476 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.5376344086 307% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238158417388 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0666234858311 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0592506155785 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153347364734 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0298438382559 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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