Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school.
In order to become successful in later career, it is critically important for school-age children to earn good grade in school. Parents can encourage their children to study well so that they get high mark in exams by awarding them some prizes for outstanding results. However, young children should never be awarded with money.
To begin with, awarding children with money brings with it a risk of providing them an opportunity to waste that money in harmful practices. The money they receive may be wasted in buying harmful fast foods or toys. For instance, few years ago, I gave my young brother some money to keep my promise to him that I would award him if he does well in the examination. Later I noticed that he bought a video game with that money. Eventually, he lost his interest in reading and got himself addicted to the video game. Doing this he could not study well and prepare adequately for his next examination. Consequently, I found out that he was among the last of his class in the next examination of him. It took a lot of effort of us to escape him from his addiction towards game and force him to study. If I had not given him that money, he would not be able to buy the video game and might perform well in the examination.
On the other hand, if parents can encourage their children to do well in the exams by buying them gifts that are beneficial for them, they would easily ensure the success of their children. There are some toys available in the market which would require the children to use their brain if they want to play with it. Playing with these toys, thus ensure the mental growth of the children. Moreover, many parents offer books to the children; books are our best friend and help us to know about the world. For example, if a child is awarded with a book full of moral stories, then the stories of the book would edifice the character of that child as it reads that book. In addition, reading books is a type of addiction, and upon finishing that particular book the child would demand for another book, which would help it to make friendship with books that is necessary to make life more beautiful.
In conclusion, parents should never offer money to their children as a gift for doing well in the examinations. Instead, they should offer the young learners gifts that are helpful for the growth of them as proper human beings.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, thus, well, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1949.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54312354312 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38145173594 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48951048951 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 586.8 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.9612916865 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.45 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.45 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.55 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.311524212914 0.236089414692 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.094688752101 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0934149252381 0.0737576698707 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229692301549 0.150856017488 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.14334443141 0.0645574589148 222% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.11 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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