Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?
n modern sophisticated world, parents have a wide range of notions about their children’s intellectual developments. A multitude of parents are of the opinion that paying their children will have positive influence on their children’s motivation for pursuing their education, others hold opposite side. The question is whether giving money for getting score would be beneficial for students or not. I profoundly subscribe to this consensus that claims offering money by parents to the youth for their score it is beneficial idea. There are several reasons, two of which will be explained in the ensuing essay.
To begin with, money plays a pivotal role as a motivation for children to do their best at school. Giving gifts and presents is a key element for persuading someone to make more efforts. Moreover, evidence has determined that giving gift specially the cash provoke students to endeavor at school for gaining higher score and accomplishing their homework which eventually lead them to get the best grade. My personal experience demonstrates a compelling example of this. When I was at elementary school my parents did not give me money if I got good score. Since I was not encouraged by my parents, as time went by, a significant reduction happened in my score. On the contrary, when I started studying at high school, the money that was paid by my parents had a paramount important role for a remarked increment in my score.
Another reason worth mentioning is that the youngster learns both the money management skill and independency as an early age. Students who are paid money for score gradually learn the process of investment compared to those who are not paid by their parents. Furthermore, the youth learn the necessity of being independent financially. Parents are responsible for providing an environment for their children to train them how to be able to balance between their income and their outcome. For instance, I pay my son and my daughter according to their GPA and ask them to keep track of the money that I dedicate for them. After a couple of years I realized that they are getting expert and adept in managing their money. Had I not given them money, they would have been able to learn how to take care of their money.
All in all, I am in approval of this argument that states children are paid by parents for their grade at school, for the motivation, managing their money, and learning how to be financially independent.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, moreover, so, for instance, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2056.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 417.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93045563549 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79111554984 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52278177458 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 632.7 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.9302694959 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.8 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.85 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.75 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.365730426482 0.236089414692 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114932719111 0.076458572812 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0778568354538 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.238090553707 0.150856017488 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0223604866437 0.0645574589148 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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