Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The world has changed tremendously in the last few decades. All sorts of innovations has been introduced to humanity, all thanks to gigantic corporations and their endorsements. Advertisements are mainly for promotion but yet served as a medium to new discoveries and I encourage their usage for the following reasons.
First and foremost, advertisements are the methods by which any organisation communicate with the people. And since no population has the ability to keep track of all the new products being made each day, there had to be a link between the makers and the buyers. Moreover, some merchandise need to be simplified for the public and here comes the advantage of a commercial ad. Take pharmaceutical companies for instance, not everyone can understand the original drug monograph and hence those organisations use a more plainer terminology. For example, when my grandmother was diagnosed with GERD and she was prescribed “Nexium”, which she recognised immediately due to the advertisements she saw, making the process of explaining the drug much easier on her doctor.
Secondly, advertisements can be used as a tool in decision making. Nowadays every item has multiple competing manufacturers, and each try to excel by adding a certain feature to their product. However, having too many options in the market with equal appeals can be time consuming for the buyer who will have to review them all before deciding. Therefore, I think the advertisements made by the producing company can highlight the main qualities of each product which can aid the consumer choosing. Illustrating that by the time I wanted to purchase a new phone and was confused by all the alternatives, and every person’s opinion was based on their experiences and preferences. In the end what really helped me make up my mind was watching the ads on the internet and made my decision based on my need, since I love taking pictures I was looking for a phone with high resolution camera.
To recapitulate, I believe that advertisements are an essential part of marketing all items and the reasons mentioned above are an example of that. Even-though there is a controversial viewpoints I believe in the advantage of advertisements and think that their positive impact far outweigh their negative influence.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use only 'plainer' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: plainer
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'viewpoint'?
Suggestion: viewpoint
...t. Even-though there is a controversial viewpoints I believe in the advantage of advertise...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, look, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1944.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 374.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19786096257 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.27050272164 2.67179642975 122% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585561497326 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 622.8 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.8971045837 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.5 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.375 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.6875 5.45110844103 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133581121101 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0455925857249 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0322934487736 0.0737576698707 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0814496880954 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0183028567443 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 58.1214874552 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.34 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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