Some people say that we should follow our dreams. Others think we should focus on achieving realistic goals
It goes without saying that having goals in the life is significantly important. There has been a controversial debate among people trying to reach their aims as to whether they should follow some realistic goals instead of following their dreams. From my perspective, pursuing dreams is more beneficial than following specific goals, and two reasons to support my viewpoint are presented as follows.
To begin with, following dreams, people are more likely to be satisfied with their personal lives. It is not a secret to anyone that we all have some ambitious desires about which we are thinking and sometimes they motivate us to pursue them but there is also a sense of frightening that is detrimental since prevent us from following wishes. I am of the opinion that humans are made up of nothing but hope and dream; it is our nature to wish and to have ambitious dreams these are making us, us. Behaving and acting according to the instinct and nature, no longer will we feel relief and comfortable because we are considering ourselves as capable and susceptible creatures that are able to do every little thing. When we are sure that we are trying to reach our dreams and goals, we definitely became more satisfied with the living which means we are able to enjoy more. Doing this, pursing desires instead of predictable and realistic goals, we will turn into happy individuals and escape from the clutches of unhappiness.
Furthermore, tracking ambitious will help people to be more successful individuals with powerful personalities. It is crystal clear that walking to a path that other people think it is nothing except failure needs a lot of motives and efforts and following dreams is one of those path. Those believing that walking on dreams path is wrong are weak because they do not have such a courageous to do so and they maybe begrudge others' success. As a result people following this rout obviously have strong characters because not all people chose to track their desires. Trying to reach to the summit of the success makes us more powerful individuals who can overcome different difficult circumstances meaning we are more likely to reach their goals and be considered as successful ones.
In sum, some I am sure would disagree with my view, pursuing dreams is so important. Not only will people following their desires be able to have happy lives, they will also be more likely to become successful.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 161, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...among people trying to reach their aims as to whether they should follow some realistic goals...
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Line 3, column 274, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this path' or 'those paths'?
Suggestion: this path; those paths
... efforts and following dreams is one of those path. Those believing that walking on dreams...
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Line 3, column 318, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'dreams'' or 'dream's'?
Suggestion: dreams'; dream's
...e path. Those believing that walking on dreams path is wrong are weak because they do ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, may, so, as to, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 15.1003584229 192% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.0752688172 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2017.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 411.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90754257908 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.657611564 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501216545012 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 633.6 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.5075543179 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.0625 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6875 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.375 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.323767473189 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0993190773008 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.060236657207 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183688045381 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0730591749473 0.0645574589148 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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