Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time.
Independence is the mere right of every individual as it is the one factor that teaches every individual to stand apart from the crowd and face the real problems by themself. With the establishment of the nuclear family, many children wish to stay away from their parents as soon as possible. However, there are some young adults to prefer to live with their families for a longer time. In my opinion, I believe that it would be better for young adults to live with their parents till they reach their high school.
First and foremost, the world has been developing in a rapid way and all the people are also changing with it. Thus, people nowadays face many problems than that of the past. It is such experiences that help them to face the real world and deal with real situations. For example, a person who is always taken care by his parents have low self-confidence and are less able to pull of serious work under immense pressure. Various entrepreneurs, like Jack Ma, Steve Jobs, etc. all have done their work out in a completely isolated place. It also gives them a real taste of how the world actually looks like.
Secondly, people who live with their parents have a tendency of being dependent towards others. As a person of the current generation, every person must explore the world, look for things that are outside the box and take on challenges. For example, it would be completely unfair for anyone to be always dependent on their parents. I didn't mean to say that we shouldn't look after our parents. But I want to say that we should also look after future in the long run.
Last but not the least; young people should explore the world during their early adulthood. Thus, people generally prefer to study abroad or on different places. For example, until high school I did my schooling in Kathmandu which is actually my home town. However, after that I have completed my undergraduate study from Chitwan which is located around 200 miles away from my home town. Such change has also provided me an opportunity to learn much more things than I could have learned from home. Such experiences have given me a completely new perspective to see the society in a completely new way.
To put it in a nutshell, it is wise for young ones to stay with their parents till high school. However, with growing age people should also explore the world and the society around us so that we can truly understand the society from our view rather than that of our parents. Furthermore, it will also strengthen us for all the hardship and privation that we have to face in the days to come.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...be always dependent on their parents. I didnt mean to say that we shouldnt look after...
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Suggestion: shouldn't
...ir parents. I didnt mean to say that we shouldnt look after our parents. But I want to s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, thus, apart from, for example, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2147.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 462.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64718614719 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44589127686 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480519480519 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 656.1 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.5207637145 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.88 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.48 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.28 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.329729075893 0.236089414692 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0932255474186 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.14524227357 0.0737576698707 197% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195019870856 0.150856017488 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.183698187923 0.0645574589148 285% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.79 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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