Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Today, most of the young adults want to stay away from their parents and be independent mostly because of contadictory views about something.In my opinion, that is not the case always. One can still be independent by being with their family. I prefer to live with my family for a longer time. I support my opinion with three compelling reasons in the following eassay.
First, independence depends on the consideration of all the aspects and situations in life. Parents only strive for your good. If you want them to be someother way you like them to be, change them. As far as I know, they will always ready to change for teir kids. For intance, when I was doing my schooling, my parents wouldn't allow me out after evening as robbery and rape cases occur quite often everywhere in our country. I changed my parents view about this as I got more matured during my college. I sat with them and talked to them that I won't be too late at night and return home earlier as soon as possible. And, according to me, this is what independence of adults is, in this case, as I got what I want by considering safety too. Back in college, I was allowed anywhere I wanted to go as I fullfilled our agreement everytime.
Second, according to me, moving away from parents for ones own interests is quite selfish. When we grow mature, our valuing of relationships worsen. We always start to think about only ourselves like my life, my career, my job and so on. But, hold on, what about your parents? Aren't they part of your life? As parents have always backed us, we should be there when they need us. For instance, take your own life as an example. Parents have worked hard to make us to the position what we are today. If it was not them, then we would have been another example of the kids who are left in drains or public dustbins. To mention an irony, those kids yearn to be with parents.
Third, parents have more experiences in life to teach their children and make them intellectual. My own experience is an comepelling example for this. My mother taught me conscience right from my childhood so that I undestood how this world works and how people will act in particular situation. She taught me how to be brave enough and face problems without getting stresssed out of life. I learned a great deal from her. One particular example is that, She taught me to independent and keep myself motivated. And so, I don't depend even on my mother in making important decisions in my life now, which is helping me decide and do what I desire for. To mention, I am independent being with my family.
In summary, there are a lot of reasons for my opinion from which I have provided above three reasons considering my life experiences too. Therefore, my opinion is that young adults should prefer to live with their families for a longer time.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, still, then, therefore, third, for instance, in particular, in summary, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 93.0 43.0788530466 216% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2334.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 513.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54970760234 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75914943092 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52482327823 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51656920078 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 730.8 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 23.0 9.59856630824 240% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 20.6003584229 160% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.8986129938 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.7272727273 100.406767564 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5454545455 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.42424242424 5.45110844103 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251447855986 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0705233951185 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.076855947991 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176669679254 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0921711236361 0.0645574589148 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.8 11.7677419355 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.81 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.94 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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