successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well
Nowadays, most people try to learn new things with the examination. They believe that the character ‘’ try and defeat’’ can have a significant effect on their personalities. Although, there is a widely held view among people that they do not have to try other ways after winning. I personally subscribe to the view that people who examine different ways in their lives are successful in comparison to other people. In- depth discussion on each of the abovementioned reasons is presented below.
First and possibly the most important reason why I believe that trying different methods in doing of our plans have positive effects on our personalities is that during this trying, we can obtain the very useful skill and valuable experience. In fact, we can get familiar with different people who have significant experiences in that field or business. To be more specific, if we examine different ways, so it is possible that we can discover a new way. This new way can change or modify our lives because people do not aware of their future. My own experience is also a compelling example of this. When I chose the master thesis, I had a plan to choose an interdisciplinary project because I wanted to learn different things about the other sciences. During my master thesis, I could deeply perceive other science which was not related to my major. This interest encouraged me to change my field in the P.Hd program. For this reason, I strongly believe that we should try diverse methods to reach our plans in addition to the main method.
There is a further more subtle word we must consider, which is the fact that if we examine new and extra methods to solve our problems, so our self-confidence will increase because we enhance our knowledge and insight. In fact, if we study the biography of famous and successful people, we will realize that these people endured different problems to become a successful person. For instance, Jack Ma, the chief manager of the Alibaba website, had diverse problems in his youth. But, he could become a prosperous and successful person because he tried different ways in his life and he had not given up. Accordingly, I believe that we should not limit our vision to only one way.
In a word, by taking all the aforementioned reasons onto account we may draw the conclusion that trying different methods have positive effects on our lives. this is primarily due to the facts we can possibly find other interests in that work and, these endeavors increases our self- confidence.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 114, Rule ID: TRY_AND[1]
Message: "Try and" is common in colloquial speech, but "'try to'" is recommended for writing.
Suggestion: try to
...believe that the character '' try and defeat'' can have a significa...
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Line 2, column 907, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Hd
...couraged me to change my field in the P.Hd program. For this reason, I strongly be...
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Line 4, column 158, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...ods have positive effects on our lives. this is primarily due to the facts we can po...
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Line 4, column 196, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'can'.
Suggestion: can
.... this is primarily due to the facts we can possibly find other interests in that work and, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, if, may, so, for instance, in addition, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2108.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 431.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8909512761 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83988065438 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503480278422 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 663.3 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.4323563781 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.380952381 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5238095238 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.71428571429 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146258698266 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0502875542919 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0554552647482 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0975306334249 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0584143530264 0.0645574589148 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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