Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is universally acknowledged that technology has a foremost role in human’s progress. Whether technology is seen as a successful and useful tool for students or not depends on the lens through which one is looking. However, I personally subscribe to this view that after the invention of cell phones or video games, children can well learn their courses, and technology has positive effects on their progress mainly because technology has a direct relationship with the yield of students’ learning, and video games can easily evoke the sense of cooperation among children, and social network can expand the level of awareness of children. In-depth discussion on each of the abovementioned reasons is presented below.
First and possibly the most important reason why I believe that technology has a significant impact on children is that children are able to easily perceive the courses which are taught in the school. In fact, technology has streamlined the process of perception of materials for students. For instance, today children can easily learn different words by the diverse application which are used in cell phones. They repeat different words with accurate pronunciation to be able to mimic the correct pronunciation of those words. For this reason, I believe that technology help children to learn effectively.
There is a further subtle word we must consider, which is the fact that online video games can create cooperation among children because they play each other, while they have the same target. Hence, video games, especially online video games, improve the relationship among children, and this environment is very suitable for education and progress. Also, children can discover their talents through video games because they game without any external forces from their families. My own experience is also a compelling example of this. I remember that my cousin had interested in playing football by Play Station Console. This dependence encouraged him to was able to find his talent in football. After 10 years, based on his interest, he could professionally play football. Accordingly, I can confidently claim that video games have a considerable contribution to children’s progress.
Finally, social networks provide a very secure environment for their subscribers to be able to expand their knowledge and insights. In fact, social media can have two major advantage for children. First of all, children can be aware of their society, so this awareness increases their security. Secondly, children can easily expand their information, so this advantage improves their insights and have positive impacts on their education.
In a word, by taking all the aforementioned reasons into account we may draw the conclusion that technology has a significant contribution to children’s progress.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ntribution to children's progress.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, finally, first, hence, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, well, while, for instance, in fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2411.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.47954545455 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03851907029 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513636363636 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 741.6 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.2376260113 48.9658058833 156% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.590909091 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.40909090909 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144318948553 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0437243716216 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0330440521951 0.0737576698707 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0818180248819 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0235920675299 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.5 10.9000537634 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 21.0 10.002688172 210% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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