In today's world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct.
It's no doubt that today our living pace have obvious tendency to accelerate in a high rate. Under this circumstance, we are asked to change the way we used to handle things because people who work slow to make sure not making any mistakes could be sort of out of date. Thus, I strongly recommend that we need to work in a more efficient mode with some risk-making mistakes to adapt modern environment.
First and foremost, with the development of advanced technology, the cost we pay for making mistakes becoming smaller and smaller. By contrast, when we produced some bugs in work, it could always be very serious problem because it's always hard to find and harder to correct. However, new-coming techniques allow us to search our mistakes very quickly and compare to avoid something wrong, an employer's efficiency is more important for recent companies. For instance, it's a huge event if newspaper made any mistakes in report old days because the correcting process normally would consume more than a whole day and it always misled a huge amount of people. But new online media never concern about such problem, because they are able easily change the content of report at any time when they found some mistakes.
Furthermore, the increasing efficiency can easily counteract the loss caused by mistakes. Take a modern clothing factory as example, if the clothes they produce meet any quality problem, they are more likely to discard the problem one. Because time used to fix the problem could produce more than ten clothes. We can see that the old fashion way of thinking is not suitable any more for today's situation. It's more important to produce more products with some mistakes than to produce small amounts of things to make sure without any problem.
To sum up, not only from the view of technology development, but also from aspect of cost, we need to work quickly and risk-making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, thus, for instance, no doubt, sort of, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1631.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 335.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86865671642 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5215065138 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.555223880597 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 522.0 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.8727567983 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.5 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9285714286 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.85714285714 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.35923499475 0.236089414692 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119463021697 0.076458572812 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.121497936749 0.0737576698707 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.261284637874 0.150856017488 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.127061403261 0.0645574589148 197% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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