TPO-20 - Independent Writing Task
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The definition of successful people is hard to define because success could come in a different manner and peoples are successful in totally different kind of field. Successful peoples could be famous or could be not, no one knows them outside their respective field. I personally partially agree with the statement that successful peoples take the risk instead of following a traditional line, but they sometimes try new things but sometimes just became successful by doing what they best can do. I am going to give various examples to bolster my vision.
According to our traditional definition, successful peoples are those who brought evolution to our human history. They swim against the stream and do something unconventional. First of all, there are two people, the first Elon Musk and second is Mark Zukerburg. Elon Musk is the perfect example of how he leaves his traditional ideas and ignore what the best of doing and introduced Tesla and SpaceX. Let travel a bit earlier to understand his ideology. When he was in the early twenties he built a game and sell that, the money he got he became CEO of PayPal and again he sells his shear and built Tesla and again he sells all of his profit to established SpaceX. Even though, he had no idea about space exploration or building an electric car. So, he left his comfort zone and does something that needs risk. But again he was not totally in dark or do not know anything about space or electric engine, because he left his Ph.D. to follow his dream, but again he got his background from his knowledge of physics.
Another person is Mark Zuckerberg, he left his undergraduate study in the final year to established Facebook or reestablished Facebook, as he already makes that software. He left his study to follow his dream and took a risk. But he is the best at doing coding, so he became successful what the best of doing.
There are other examples of famous peoples who became successful by taking the risk but they did not go outside their well-acquired knowledge. For example, some famous revolutionary scientists like Aristotle or Copernicus. They both took the risk of went against traditional ideas or against the church. That cost them severely, but they established their principle. Again they both became successful by doing what were they best of. There are also many people who are not that famous in outside of their field. For example a famous doctor, who is barely known outside of his field or an employee of a company, who achieved prestigious prizes for his company but not well known by others.
To recapitulate this, I would say that successful peoples do take the risk to change the conventional ideas and bring change to our society, but they do not leave their well-acquired knowledge. They actually use the knowledge to establish themselves. They leave their comfort zone to do something different but by doing what are they best of.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 82, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a different manner" with adverb for "different"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...rd to define because success could come in a different manner and peoples are successful in totally d...
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Line 8, column 344, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ent but by doing what are they best of.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, second, so, well, for example, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 31.0 13.8261648746 224% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2427.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 501.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84431137725 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73107062784 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68743036802 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.455089820359 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 746.1 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.092230361 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.3461538462 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2692307692 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.23076923077 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227845488673 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0734139167407 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0816563192088 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155268659197 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0847696290254 0.0645574589148 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.07 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.