TPO 31: Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past.
Modern technology and its complexity have engendered copious problems besides its merits. Nowadays, technology provides a condition as time goes on, every day you might see new things; in a nutshell, the world is changing quickly. One of the contentious issues regarding these variations is that some people are inclined toward the opinion that people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives that people were in the past. Personally, I subscribe this idea as well since human beings are ambitious and they are thirsty for new and advanced technology every day; what is more, these changes somehow disturb their minds. In what follows, I will further elaborate on my vantage point.
The first and possibly the foremost reason why I believe that humans are more unsatisfied with quick changes in the world is that, in nature, human is an ambitious being and normally would not be quenched by advancement. In fact, humans are inclined toward new and advanced technology every day so as to have modern and comfortable lives. This innate characteristic leads them to earn and gain luxurious things. Considering aforementioned feature, most people cannot adjust their life to the speed variation the life has; they cannot buy new and advanced things every day. Having ambition, on the one hand, and not being able to be adapted to quick changes in the world, on the other hand, cause them to be unsatisfied and sad.
Another significant point which deserves some words here in corroborating my notion is that even if people be affordable to buy new and advanced things, in fact, being able to satisfy their ambition, their mind is actually disturbed and busy. They always think of their surroundings and these changes. Looking back to the past, people's minds were more relieved and they were less disturbed because there were fewer changes in their surroundings.
To sum it all up, by taking all the above-mentioned grounds into consideration we may logically draw the conclusion that today's people are less happy inasmuch as the changes in the world are quick and people normally cannot adjust themselves to these variations; moreover, even they can, their minds are busier since they have to think of it continuously.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 296, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...d new and advanced technology every day so as to have modern and comfortable lives. This...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, besides, first, if, look, may, moreover, regarding, so, well, as to, in fact, what is more, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1870.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 369.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06775067751 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68826219379 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.531165311653 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 577.8 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.7477566898 48.9658058833 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.571428571 100.406767564 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3571428571 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 5.45110844103 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.325701201859 0.236089414692 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104843397478 0.076458572812 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.137685591907 0.0737576698707 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207545588432 0.150856017488 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0811179868599 0.0645574589148 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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