TPO 40:
Question :Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school.
Do you think this is a good idea?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Giving present like money or etc. to childs for acheiving success is a very debatful topic. Some people blieve this can change habitate of child and make them dependable to presence of reward but in contrast, other blieve this make child to progress faster and more ejoyable. In my point of view reward is a very effective approach that is useful for childs.
For the First reason, I should mention about structrue of brain that works with the rule of reward and punishment. Human from the stone age advent up to now human learned many things with this rule. Brain likes to continue some affords that will have rewards to it. So with regards to this point, with bringing rewards like money parent are encouraging kids to try better again to have good grades. This matter will effects to brain to make progress to obtain better result that satisfy this sense of reward.
The next reason that I blieve is feedback. kids specially in childness should get feedback about they works to get better estimation about their situation and better understanding about consequences of their works or to know better why they are doing that. These questions are the source of motivation and willingness that can be inspiring for childs. Not only about the motivation, but also feedback can show them about the direction of thier efforts and can be a better guidance to them to continue more.
The Final point is that, for fixing this issue that rewarding make childs dependable to it and can cause some problem in where there is no reward, parents can use punishment sometimes to make some balance in rewarding/punishment system. So childs learn that sometimes there is no reward and in addition there will be punishment to confront them to both side of consequences.
In conclusion, reward is an effective way to motivate childs for moving forward and increase their ambitious but as every other affairs having balance is more important and parent can attain better sitiuation with use reward in a balanced way.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 417, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'effect'
Suggestion: effect
...n to have good grades. This matter will effects to brain to make progress to obtain bet...
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Line 5, column 44, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Kids
... next reason that I blieve is feedback. kids specially in childness should get feedb...
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Line 5, column 103, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'work'
Suggestion: work
...hildness should get feedback about they works to get better estimation about their si...
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Line 7, column 99, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ing make childs dependable to it and can cause some problem in where there is no ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, so, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1673.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 341.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90615835777 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5607403514 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510263929619 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.7067604177 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.5625 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3125 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.8125 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136159608005 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0493960833593 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.025906389216 0.0737576698707 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0786789122242 0.150856017488 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0135041943504 0.0645574589148 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.