TPO 40. Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?

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TPO 40.

Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?

TPO 40- some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. do you think this is a good idea?

Since the dawn of civilization, education has played a dominant role in the individual’s way of living. academicians are putting all their efforts to find ways which can improve both the education system, and children’s efficiency to make a better world in the future. there exist the inevitable question which has caused heated debate among academicians that is ''what is parents’ role to boost the training system?'' some people are inclining toward the opinion that paying to school for each good mark, whereas others hold exactly the opposite perspective. I agree with the prior group. In the subsequent paragraphs, I will explicate my point of view through outstanding reasons and provide some details to elucidate my opinion.

The most prominent point to be mention is that education has a significant and undeniable task in one's success and happiness. because of its importance, states have the ministry of education. Consequently, there must be strict oversight of the schools. Sometimes some parents pay money for their high children’s grade. Over time, this action will divert schools from their mission; it causes some schools do not follow their aim and their instruction which governments prepare them for making an advanced society. For example, my cousin, who call Zobin, educated such school. After a few years later, we heard his school is closed and their teachers were fired because they appeal some extra money to teach better.

Another equally noteworthy and exquisite idea that comes to my mind regarding the boost of children's score is that parents can encourage and give some presents. This action makes a better feel and children learn that there is a reward for their good and decent operation. I believe its benefits outweigh the drawbacks. Also, children should be knowing there is a fine of their mistakes. In Sharif University of Tehran, one of the most prestigious universities in my country, a very reliable research conducted recently and it revealed that the majority of students who were cheered by parents are more successful.

in short, all the aforementioned lead us to the conclusion that education is leading in people life and parent should be following and help their authorities to achieve their goals.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, if, regarding, so, whereas, for example, in short

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2055.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 390.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26923076923 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83597278149 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594871794872 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 615.6 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.6898490749 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.8571428571 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5714285714 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.28571428571 5.45110844103 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.47864351125 0.236089414692 203% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128041403332 0.076458572812 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.182374100632 0.0737576698707 247% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.330590225847 0.150856017488 219% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.344365518699 0.0645574589148 533% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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