When schools do not have enough funding or teachers, some people think physical education classes should be cut, while others believe that courses in art and music should be eliminated first. Which do you think is preferable, and why?
Institutions should be meticulous when they confront the dilemma of excluding one of courses including movement or aesthetics because the decision may heavily influence learners’ situation. I believe that cutting the funding of the class of physical education is a satisfactory way to solve the financial problem. I feel this way three main reasons, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, there is no alternative for classes of art and music, which means students could lose their opportunity to study these academic disciplines completely. To be frank, undergraduates can do any workout independently by various means such as jogging around campus or going to gym regularly. Therefore, closing the course of physical education will not impede students to improve their health by carrying out exercises frequently. On the other hand, learners will encounter with some burden to find classes of arts off-campus. Hence, they may end up becoming totally unable to learn what they want.
Secondly, understanding and performing art improves the brain function, so pupils can study effectively other academic disciplines as well. Having an advanced intelligence is the main portion of academic success for everyone in the educational organizations. Fortunately, learners can improve their cognitive ability thanks to arts. Consequently, their overall academic success will increase significantly.
Finally, performing arts mitigates the anxiety of individuals, so they will avoid certain problems. Most individuals, especially introverts, tend to be prone to depression because they cannot open up their opinion to others. Thus, they may experience some problems associated with emotional disorder. However, they can show their thought through the self-expression while doing the job of art. Hence, they will be no longer exposed to stress caused by not being capable of discussing with others. As a result, they will not suffer from depression and stress-related issues.
In summation, universities’ admission center needs to halt the course of physical education rather than music and art. This is because students cannot find substitute classes in different areas if they want to learn the art. Furthermore, arts and music facilitate brain development, and diminish people’s possibility of being anxious.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, while, i feel, of course, such as, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2005.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 353.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.67988668555 4.8611393121 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11346266019 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.606232294618 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 611.1 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.8739666071 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.4761904762 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8095238095 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.85714285714 5.45110844103 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22215707135 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0620086974136 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0505307788759 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124517401205 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0492919637686 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 58.1214874552 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.37 10.9000537634 141% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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