Your city or province has received a large donation of money to improve the education of children. It must choose between spending the money on improvement of early childhood education(for children from ages 4 to 7) and spending the money on improvement of education for older children(ages 11 to 14). Which do you think is a better option?
Children are the future of every country and so countries should spend money to improve the education of children. When a city or province have received a large donation of money to improve children's education, it is difficult to choose whether it should be spent on early childhood education or education of older children. However, in my opinion, a little more importance should be given to improve early childhood education and hence the city should spent the donation for the same. My opinion is based on the below reasons.
First, early childhood, that is, children from ages 4 to 7 is a very critical stage in the development of a child. This is stage when a child leaves the comfort of their home and first enters the world of formal education. Hence, it is our responsibility, including the city and province, to make that transition smooth and enjoyable for the child. It is in this stage that a child starts to meet a number of new people, including teacher and friends. Many of the students might be tensed and they might not like coming to school if the atmosphere at school is not enjoyable. Hence, the city should use the donation to add more facilities like more play areas and more toys in the classes of these kids so that kids starts to enjoy coming to the school. Also, more teachers should be appointed in these early childhood classes so that every child gets a special attention they need.
Moreover, in these early years, we introduce a number of subjects to a child. Hence, it is pivotal that the children understand the basics of all these subjects very clearly. If a child doesn't understand the basic concepts, then he/she might find it very difficult to understand when they go up in their studies. For instance, it is in this early childhood, we introduce addition and subtraction to the children. It is extremely important that the kids understand the concept of addition and subtraction clearly rather than just learning it by heart. For this, it is good to give each of these kids an abacus to learn the addition and subtraction faster. Similarly, in these years kids learn to read and write. To cultivate a good reading habit in children, the city should add a number of children's books to current library. Providing these facilities require fund and hence the donation received by the city should be used in early childhood education.
In conclusion, ages from 4 to 7 are one of the most important stages in the life of a child. They learn and understand many things around them. So, it is our responsibility to provide them with adequate materials and give them a good education and make them a better citizen. Hence, the donation received should be used for early childhood education.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, however, if, moreover, similarly, so, then, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 8.0752688172 310% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2257.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 474.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76160337553 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64463623794 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.411392405063 0.524837075471 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 695.7 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.8072597379 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.0416666667 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.75 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.41666666667 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.309427990363 0.236089414692 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.09009799294 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.135839489082 0.0737576698707 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20673709266 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.192627934765 0.0645574589148 298% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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