Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better for people to move out of their hometowns when they become adults, instead of staying in their home communities for their whole lives. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays the ratio of people who decide to move to another country is increasing. I entirely agree with the idea that is far better people choose to leave their hometown and move to live in another place when they reach adulthood for two reasons. They can find more and better job opportunities in comparison with the market job of their hometown. And also, they can start a new life in a city with different opportunities for him and his family.
First and foremost, this new generation of people is willing to move out to another country or city when they reach adulthood due to they looking for better job opportunities and better wages that in their hometown is impossible to find. For example, it has been shown statistically in recent studies, that the proportion of mobility of young people between 25 and 35 years of age is about 65% of the total of young professionals in a country. In this sense, a better life is the driving force behind their work hard and the decision to leave their family, friends in their hometown.
Another essential point to consider is that people who become adults are able to start a new life and raising a family in a place which has better opportunities for them and their children. For instance, experts claim that the currently trendy of the new generation of people is travel around the world and chose the best place to live due to in a little community does not give them the opportunity to improve their personal and professional life. In this sense, when I reach the adulthood, I am going to move out to New York pursuing my dreams and thinking on better opportunities for my future children.
In sum, instead of some people believe that it is better to stay in their community all the life, I am of the conviction that is better to prompt people to go out and find a new place to live and developed.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, look, so, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1524.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 333.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.57657657658 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60209127186 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 212.727598566 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.447447447447 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 480.6 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.7332786323 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.545454545 100.406767564 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.2727272727 20.6045352989 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.72727272727 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.353957129653 0.236089414692 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.155290551396 0.076458572812 203% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0741606129453 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.24341745461 0.150856017488 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0416595409158 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 11.7677419355 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.95 58.1214874552 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.88 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 86.8835125448 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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