College students should be encouraged to pursue subjects that interest them rather than the courses that seem most likely to lead to jobs.
Passion and love is the essence of any achievement in the history of human civilization. Without the zeal one cannot progress in their chosen field of study, neither can they make any contribution to the society for a greater good. Colleges are to hone the skills of the novices to buttress the fledgling ideas and guide them into attaining reality. Mere jobs should not be a goal in college education. That will debilitate a whole generation in guiding them to a wrong direction, while they could have prospered in their field of interest.
Colleges are homes for budding authors, writers, scientists, lawyers and in that the aim is to abridge the gap in molding the passion into professional and personal growth. After the rudimentary knowledge from the middle schools, colleges are to cater to the selective path one chooses to delve deep to rip benefits in personal achievements as well as in societal contribution. Running after job and in turn, money, can only lead to perpetual mediocrity. It's the holistic approach to life that one looks up to garner in a higher educational institute rather than the thraldom of utilitarianism. No good can ever be achieved by bombarding the ebullient minds towards materialistic gains. It will eventually push a whole generation to a life of 9 to 5 job - that they don't like - that they don't care in improving.
It's not just the harm that such an encouragement can bring, it also looms large on the society and its betterment. Colleges are the places for radical ideas - ideas that can bring changes, unforeseen, are the places where the future statesmen will see their agitations nd debates shaping the society and the world at large. What if Einstein was encouraged to pursue law to work for a prestigious law farm? We wouldn't be having the theories in physics to untangle the intricate nuances of the universe at the nuclear level. The dream of quantum computing would never start budding - the solar panels would never be created - theory of relativity would be non existant.
Although, it can be argued that, following passion doesn't fetch one the living that one expects. Pursuing the goal of being a writer may be a difficult path to earn money and live a lavish life. Hoping to scratch a mark in the field of music may be even daunting a task, as the industry is of cut-throat competition. Still, pursuing studies to get a job doesn't justify the ability to earn. Life happens once and one should live up to one's dream. And for jobs, colleges can have vocational training to help one get a suitable job to earn enough for a livelihood.
In retrospection, we can certainly conclude that colleges should encourage one to pursue one's dream and help in bettering the skills one possesses and thereby encouraging personal growth and the growth of the society. Courses to lead one to job should be optional and available to take up as a vocational course. Thus the balance remains attainable and will eventually do better for the student and society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 143, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to field'
Suggestion: to field
...eal one cannot progress in their chosen field of study, neither can they make any con...
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Line 3, column 457, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
... can only lead to perpetual mediocrity. Its the holistic approach to life that one ...
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Line 3, column 752, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'job' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'jobs'.
Suggestion: jobs
... a whole generation to a life of 9 to 5 job - that they dont like - that they dont ...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ion to a life of 9 to 5 job - that they dont like - that they dont care in improving...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...5 job - that they dont like - that they dont care in improving. Its not just the...
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Suggestion: wouldn't
... to work for a prestigious law farm? We wouldnt be having the theories in physics to un...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... of relativity would be non existant. Although, it can be argued that, followi...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...t can be argued that, following passion doesnt fetch one the living that one expects. ...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...n. Still, pursuing studies to get a job doesnt justify the ability to earn. Life happe...
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Line 9, column 315, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...able to take up as a vocational course. Thus the balance remains attainable and will...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, may, so, still, thus, well, while, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.4196629213 185% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2493.0 2235.4752809 112% => OK
No of words: 513.0 442.535393258 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85964912281 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75914943092 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76302578779 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 270.0 215.323595506 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526315789474 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 777.6 704.065955056 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.6402383128 60.3974514979 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.72 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.52 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.64 5.21951772744 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216866106162 0.243740707755 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0555780231246 0.0831039109588 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0420735034063 0.0758088955206 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115464315406 0.150359130593 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0331549046181 0.0667264976115 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 100.480337079 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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