The following is a memorandum from the business manager of WLSS television station.
"Over the past year, our late-night news program has devoted increasingly more time to covering national news and less time to covering weather and local news. During the same time period, most of the complaints we received from viewers were concerned with the station's coverage of weather and local news. In addition, several local businesses that used to run advertisements during our late-night news program have just cancelled their advertising contracts with us. Therefore, in order to attract more viewers to our news programs and to avoid losing any further advertising revenues, we should expand the coverage of weather and local news on all our news programs."
In the memorandum by the business manager of the television station proposed to expand their coverage of weather and local news on all their news programs in order to attract more viewers to their news programs and to avoid losing any further advertising revenues. The manager come to this conclusion based on complaints received from the viewers as well as cancellation their advertising contracts with local businesses. However, before this recommendation can be properly evaluated, three question must be answered.
First of all, does the add company still focus on television advertisement? It is possible that the add company is more focusing on digital content like You Tube, Facebook or other social network rather than television advertisement. We live in an age of modern science where internet streaming is much preferable than television. So may be the add company significantly focusing on how to spread their product publicity through internet and other online sources. If either of the scenarios has merit, then conclusion drawn in the original argument is significantly weakened.
Secondly, do all ages of the people like to see local news and weather news? The manager of the television assumes that the choice of all viewers is same, that means all ages of viewers like to watch same kind of things like weather and local news. However, this might not be the case. Perhaps the young generation like to watch national news and the middle old generation like local and weather news. It is very easy to find out the weather condition by the young generation through internet, as though they are very active on internet nowadays.
Finally, is past years condition still not changed? The argument fails to provide any justification that past years situation is similar to current times. Perhaps, economical situation may be change with modern technology. It is possible that people are more attracted to smartphone than television. Young generation spend more time on their laptop rather than television. If the viewers are not much interested like past years, then the argument does not hold water.
In conclusion, the argument, as it stands now, is considerably flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If the author is able to answer the three question above and offer more evidence ( perhaps in the form of a systematic research study ), then it will be possible to fully evaluate the viability of the proposed recommendation to expand their coverage of weather and local news on all their news programs in order to attract more viewers to their news programs and to avoid losing any further advertising revenues.
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Essay evaluation report
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 431 350
No. of Characters: 2176 1500
No. of Different Words: 193 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.556 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.049 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.721 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 156 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 130 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 87 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.524 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.876 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.619 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.292 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.524 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.103 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 20, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...must be answered. First of all, does the add company still focus on television adver...
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Line 3, column 97, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...sion advertisement? It is possible that the add company is more focusing on digital con...
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Line 3, column 342, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...h preferable than television. So may be the add company significantly focusing on how t...
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Line 7, column 111, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'years'' or 'year's'?
Suggestion: years'; year's
... to provide any justification that past years situation is similar to current times. ...
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Line 7, column 165, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
...n is similar to current times. Perhaps, economical situation may be change with modern tec...
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Line 9, column 207, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e question above and offer more evidence perhaps in the form of a systematic rese...
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Line 9, column 259, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... the form of a systematic research study , then it will be possible to fully evalu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, well, in conclusion, kind of, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 55.5748502994 124% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 16.3942115768 146% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2229.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 431.0 441.139720559 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1716937355 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80562335666 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46403712297 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 701.1 705.55239521 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 80.3136707808 57.8364921388 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.142857143 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5238095238 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.85714285714 5.70786347227 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250948942423 0.218282227539 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.066791390411 0.0743258471296 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0829403731067 0.0701772020484 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139602438032 0.128457276422 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0724647506112 0.0628817314937 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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