The autonomy of any country is based on the strength of its borders; if the number of illegal immigrants entering a country cannot be checked, both its economy and national identity are endangered. Because illegal immigrants pose such threats, every effort must be made to return them to their country of origin.
The opinion in the above argument states that any country needs strong borders to reduce the numbers of immigrants. Immigrants endanger economy and national identity, hence every effort must be made to return them to their country of origin. While the argument sounds plausible at first glance, it ignores certain crucial assumptions.
First, the author states that the autonomy of any country is based on the strength of its borders. He doesn't provide evidence to support this assumption. Is it really true that this is the case? The autonomy of a country can be defined using various parameters, like military strength, amount of imports, political deals etc. It could be that many countries find the strength of its borders the most important parameter for the autonomy of the country, but it is false to say that this is true for any country. Take for example the EU. In this continent, you are free to travel from country to country without severe rules. You are free to go wherever you want to go. The most important factor for autonomy isn't the strength of its borders to reduce the number of immigrants in the EU, otherwise they would be a lot more careful to let in immigrants. Thus, the author wrongly makes generalized assumptions, that are not true for the entire world.
Secondly, the author states that, when the number of illegal immigrants can not be checked, both economy and national identity are endangered. This doesn't have to be true. Maybe there are many jobs that needs to get fulfilled, but the people in the country are not able to get all the job applications filled. The immigrants could fill this job applications and it will gain better economy. Thus, not in all countries this assumption would hold true. Also, it doesn't need to be true that the national identity is endangered. In the Netherlands, there are a lot of foreign people with other culture and believes, but the national identity of the Netherlands is not endangered at all. It is a country where people live with each other and typical traditions, like celebrating "Sinterklaas" are still a tradition and will be in the future, even though there are many foreign people in the Netherlands who don't celebrate it. We can respect each others traditions and the national identity will not be endangered.
Furthermore, even if the above is true, is it true that every effort has to be made to return the immigrants to their country of origin. Is it even possible to do this? It can lead to very unsatisfactory conditions. It restricts the freedom of people and sending immigrants to their origin country may cost an abundance of money. If this is true, maybe this will endanger the economy, because of the costs of sending the immigrants back. The author needs to provide information about what efforts have to be made to send the immigrants back. Is it costly and efficient? How are they going to do it, because it is easily said but not easily done.
In conclusion, the assumptions that were made by the author are not entirely logically convincing. The author wrongly makes generalized assumptions, about that the autonomy of any country is based on its strength of its borders. He should provide evidence that economy and national identity are in any country endangered by immigrants, because there are various reasons to think this is not a logical assumption. The efforts that have to be made to return the immigrants to their origin country are not stated in the argument, he should provide this information, because otherwise it can not be concluded if these efforts are possible and endanger the economy of the country even more.
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Essay evaluation report
No. of Words: 625 350 //less content wanted
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 6
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2
No. of Sentences: 33 15
No. of Words: 625 350
No. of Characters: 2937 1500
No. of Different Words: 222 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 5 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.699 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.575 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 210 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 163 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 98 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 61 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.939 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.589 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.576 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.265 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.425 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.105 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ased on the strength of its borders. He doesnt provide evidence to support this assump...
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Line 3, column 708, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
... The most important factor for autonomy isnt the strength of its borders to reduce t...
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Line 5, column 149, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... national identity are endangered. This doesnt have to be true. Maybe there are many j...
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Line 5, column 461, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...is assumption would hold true. Also, it doesnt need to be true that the national ident...
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Line 5, column 913, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...y foreign people in the Netherlands who dont celebrate it. We can respect each other...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, still, thus, while, as to, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 45.0 19.6327345309 229% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 28.8173652695 215% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 55.5748502994 140% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3029.0 2260.96107784 134% => OK
No of words: 620.0 441.139720559 141% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88548387097 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.98996985923 4.56307096286 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75177125816 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 204.123752495 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.385483870968 0.468620217663 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 964.8 705.55239521 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 4.96107784431 282% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 2.70958083832 332% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 34.0 19.7664670659 172% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 58.9102669335 57.8364921388 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.0882352941 119.503703932 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2352941176 23.324526521 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.82352941176 5.70786347227 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 8.20758483034 268% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.380409497272 0.218282227539 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0936023120306 0.0743258471296 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0925757042656 0.0701772020484 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223719019309 0.128457276422 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0471097139067 0.0628817314937 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 14.3799401198 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.15 8.32208582834 86% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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