On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals
The given text talks about the population in Balmer Island increases in the summer months and the traffic accidents also increase. The text decribes a possible solution and implies that it would reduce moped accidents in Balmer Island. However the text makes several unsubstantiated assumptions.
One of the claims is that a reduction in the number of rentals per day by the island's moped rental companies would reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians. However, it is not necessary that this happens. Reduction in the number of mopeds on the road would reduce the traffic. Thus, it is quite possible that the rest of the traffic, including mopeds, on the drives more rashly. Less traffic on the road offers them more space where they can speed and possibly flout traffic laws. Thus, a limit on the reduction of moped rentals per day need not achieve the desired effect of reduced number of accidents. To shed more light, there should be a study on the accidents that happened - why they happened, whether it was the pedestrian's fault or the moped rider's, whether the rider was drunk, etc.
Moreover, rental companies could get around the daily rental restriction by splitting their companies into several chunks, each of which can then rent mopeds independently. Even if they adhere to the limit, they might be able to rent the same number of or even more mopeds.
The text mentions that the restriction on the daily number of moped rentals was implemented in the neighbouring town of Seaville and a 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents was observed last year.
Firstly, there is no evidence to connect the daily rental restriction to the effect that was observed. In other words, the restriction need not be the cause of the reduced percentage of moped accidents. It is quite possible that reduction in moped accidents was due to other factors such as information campaigns by the town council or hiked fines for traffic infractions.
Secondly, even if the restriction was the cause of decreased percentage of accidents, it is not necessary that the same measure would work in Balmer Island. Perhaps the residents of Seaville are much more sensitive to traffic safety and the rental restriction made them ride the mopeds more carefully, while the residents of Balmer Island could be the more rebellious kind having an opposite reaction to the moped rental restriction.
It is essential to have a detailed study that answers why the restriction worked in Seaville, if it at all did, and whether the same could be applicable to the populace of Balmer Island.
To conlude the text makes several unstated and unsubstantiated assumptions that must be tackled before it can be concluded that a daily restriction on moped rental would bring down the percentage of moped accidents in Balmer Island.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 471 350
No. of Characters: 2311 1500
No. of Different Words: 191 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.659 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.907 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.635 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 168 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 117 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 82 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 58 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.55 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.547 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.65 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.348 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.646 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.112 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 8 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 237, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...educe moped accidents in Balmer Island. However the text makes several unsubstantiated ...
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Line 5, column 816, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...iders, whether the rider was drunk, etc. Moreover, rental companies could get aro...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, thus, while, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2380.0 2260.96107784 105% => OK
No of words: 471.0 441.139720559 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05307855626 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70930675868 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.424628450106 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 725.4 705.55239521 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.5555078537 57.8364921388 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.0 119.503703932 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.55 23.324526521 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.45 5.70786347227 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 5.15768463074 155% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.306043137978 0.218282227539 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103774083007 0.0743258471296 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0853887408022 0.0701772020484 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151257763864 0.128457276422 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.066607723447 0.0628817314937 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 98.500998004 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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