The Commercial airline industry in the country of Freedonia has experienced impressive growth in the past three years. This trend will surely continue in the years to come, since the airline industry will benefit from recent changes in Freedonian society: Income are rising, most employees now receive more vacation time, and interest in travel is rising, as shown by an increase in media attention devoted to foreign culture and tourist attractions
Commercial airline industry in Freedonia has experienced a huge growth since three years ago due to economic changes and more advertisement on foreign cultures. Bigger incomes, more vacation time and desire of people to travel abroad are pointed out as some factors related to increase on airline industry. However, this nowadays scenario may be different in the following years. For example, people can suddenly change to spend their vacation in local cities in Freedonia rather than to travel to a foreign country. In this cases, they can use other kinds of transportation such trains, buses or private cars. Moreover, with higher incomes people may decide to spend their money in other activities instead of traveling abroad. Finally, airlines companies may also rise the tickets` price. So, people may gradually stop buying tickets.
It is possible that economic and advertisemnets factors can contribute to increase the demand in Freedonia dor more international flights. However, it is unsure how the future in Freedonia will be. The economy in Freedonia may be unstanble, so in the following years income may start to decrease. So, people may quickly stop traveling abroad. Moreover, within higher incomes people usually spend their money in other activities rather than travel abroal. For example, people may buy better houses or more comfortable furniture for their homes. They may also to invest more on their own education to get better jobs that are being offered due to the better economic situation of Freedonia.
Besides economic factors, the impact of ads on Freedonia`s population should be studied. , it is necessary to investigate the role of media in Freedonia, before to affirm that ads affect people`s decisions. An illustration, most of population in Freedonia do not watch TV. However, most of the ads and information about foreign trips and culture is exhibited on TV. Thus, in this case ads will have a poor impact on people`s decisions. Moreover, even though many people watch TV and other medias, other ads about other products or actives can be showed. So, people may see ads about a adavantages of buying a new car, or a very local place to spend a vacation or a professional course to improve their changes to get a better jobs. Thus, all those ads will compete for attention at the same time that medias give attention to foreign cultures.
In conclusion, studies should be conducted about the stability of Freedonia`s economy and desires of its population on how to spend their vacation.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: It is possible that economic and advertisemnets factors can contribute to increase the demand in Freedonia dor more international flights.
Error: dor Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: advertisemnets Suggestion: advertisements
Sentence: The economy in Freedonia may be unstanble, so in the following years income may start to decrease.
Error: unstanble Suggestion: unstable
Sentence: Moreover, within higher incomes people usually spend their money in other activities rather than travel abroal.
Error: abroal Suggestion: abroad
Sentence: So, people may see ads about a adavantages of buying a new car, or a very local place to spend a vacation or a professional course to improve their changes to get a better jobs.
Error: adavantages Suggestion: advantages
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flaws:
the arguments are not exactly right on the point.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 412 350
No. of Characters: 2051 1500
No. of Different Words: 197 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.505 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.978 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.639 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 167 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 115 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 72 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.913 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.235 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.783 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.308 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.456 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.085 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 521, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...than to travel to a foreign country. In this cases, they can use other kinds of tran...
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Line 3, column 262, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'years'' or 'year's'?
Suggestion: years'; year's
...a may be unstanble, so in the following years income may start to decrease. So, peopl...
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Line 5, column 95, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ia's population should be studied. , it is necessary to investigate the role...
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Line 5, column 409, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... on TV. Thus, in this case ads will have a poor impact on people's decisions...
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Line 5, column 600, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...be showed. So, people may see ads about a adavantages of buying a new car, or a v...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, however, if, may, moreover, so, thus, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2142.0 2260.96107784 95% => OK
No of words: 412.0 441.139720559 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19902912621 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87713284432 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 677.7 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.2583323757 57.8364921388 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.25 119.503703932 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1666666667 23.324526521 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.875 5.70786347227 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.67664670659 278% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127272917353 0.218282227539 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0425826551121 0.0743258471296 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0660694328025 0.0701772020484 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0762484675461 0.128457276422 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0580600576257 0.0628817314937 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.58 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 98.500998004 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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