The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
The author's letter to the editor of the Balmer Island claims that the number of mopeds rented by moped rental companies should be limited to half of the actual number during summer season. By stating in this way, author fails to mention several key factors on the bases of which this argument can be evaluated. The conclusion relies on assumptions, for which there is no clear evidence. Therefore, the argument is rather weak, unconvincing and has several flaws.
Firstly, according to the author, population of Balmer Island increases dramatically during summer. Undoubtedly Balmer Island is a tourist spot. As summer season is a time when people go out for vacations. By reducing the number of mopeds from 50 to 25 will highly effects the tourists. It will be highly difficult for them to visit places around Balmer. This decision may result in reduction of visitors to Balmer Island. Therefore, author has to determine all the necessary side effects or causes of this decision. Furthermore, one can also think of other ways to reduce accidents. For instance, Government can think of widening the road and creating foot paths for pedestrians to reduce the accidents. Also, Decreasing the mopeds to half of the number may result in increase in number of pedestrians, which might again cause the same issue.
Secondly, one can think of improving other ways of transport. For example, increasing the public transport such as buses, metro, vans which can carry more people as well as reasonable for the visitors. One cannot deny that 4 wheeler are safer than 2 wheeler and hence we may prevent the serious accidents. This will not only reduce the use of mopeds but also increases the economy of the state as it will attract for visitors. In addition to that, traffic rules can be improved to reduce the accidents. Motorists should pay a high penalty if they are not following the rules or if they commit any accidents. Hence, I can say that there are numerous ways to deal with this issue.
Finally, author comments that, 50 percent reduction in moped accidents was achieved last year on the island of Seaville. And hence, it will establish a similar effect in Balmer. I strongly disagree with this statement because, we are talking about 2 different islands. There might be various dissimilarities between these places. Author has to make a proper survey taking all the important factors to condsideration. There should be some strong evidences like last years's population of Seaville Island compared to other years because if the population is reduced then reduction in accidents is obvious.
To wind up, the argument is flawed and therefore, unconvincing. It could considerably be strengthened by adding some cogent evidences based on relevant facts. It is very necessary to have a complete knowledge on the issue to take any decision.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Author has to make a proper survey taking all the important factors to condsideration.
Error: condsideration Suggestion: consideration
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argument 1 -- not OK. it is like issue arguments
argument 2 -- not OK. it is like issue arguments
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 30 15
No. of Words: 472 350
No. of Characters: 2310 1500
No. of Different Words: 243 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.661 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.894 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.607 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 186 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 117 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 85 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.733 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.06 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.633 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.239 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.425 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.064 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 138, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...moped rental companies should be limited to half of the actual number during summ...
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Line 2, column 146, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...l key factors on the bases of which this argument can be evaluated. The conclusio...
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Line 9, column 120, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'effect'
Suggestion: effect
...ber of mopeds from 50 to 25 will highly effects the tourists. It will be highly diffic...
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Line 12, column 141, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...duce the accidents. Also, Decreasing the mopeds to half of the number may result ...
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Line 16, column 155, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... buses, metro, vans which can carry more people as well as reasonable for the vis...
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Line 17, column 96, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'wheeler' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'wheelers'.
Suggestion: wheelers
...ot deny that 4 wheeler are safer than 2 wheeler and hence we may prevent the serious ac...
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Line 19, column 135, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ollowing the rules or if they commit any accidents. Hence, I can say that there a...
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Line 23, column 150, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...f Seaville. And hence, it will establish a similar effect in Balmer. I strongly d...
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Line 24, column 142, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ifferent islands. There might be various dissimilarities between these places. Au...
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Line 25, column 153, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...dsideration. There should be some strong evidences like last yearss population of...
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Line 31, column 30, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[4]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'complete knowledge'.
Suggestion: complete knowledge
...nt facts. It is very necessary to have a complete knowledge on the issue to take any decision.
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Line 31, column 85, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...edge on the issue to take any decision.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, such as, talking about, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.9520958084 170% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 55.5748502994 117% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2423.0 2260.96107784 107% => OK
No of words: 472.0 441.139720559 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13347457627 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6610686524 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71803373337 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 204.123752495 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51906779661 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 740.7 705.55239521 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 19.7664670659 152% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.3731850732 57.8364921388 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.7666666667 119.503703932 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7333333333 23.324526521 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.36666666667 5.70786347227 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 21.0 5.15768463074 407% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218368460923 0.218282227539 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0570133269861 0.0743258471296 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0805564476948 0.0701772020484 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0676402756975 0.128457276422 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0857541999204 0.0628817314937 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 14.3799401198 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 48.3550499002 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 98.500998004 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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