The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In the given passage, the author thinks that limiting the number of mopeds rented by the island's rental companies would reduce the number of accidents in Balmer Island. In my opinion the conclusion is flawed because it fails to account for a numbers of factors that must be taken in account. In the argument, the author not only uses ambiguous and vague terms, but also uses imcompatible comparison with another town named Seaville. Moreover, the author relies on incompatible statistics in the argument.
First of all, the author of the argument indicated that moped is one of the popular transportation in Balmer Island. But there is no indication that moped is the most popular or the only popular trasportation medium for the people of Balmer Island. So, there is no guarantee that reducing the number of moped will significantly decrease the number of accidents between moped and pedestrians. People in Balmer Island may use other form of transportations and they may also involve in accidents. There is no clear information that may prove that mopeds are most responsible for the accidents in Balmer Island.
Secondly, the author only states limiting the number of mopeds rented by the island's rental companies as the only solution. But there is no guarantee that this will work most effectively in the given context. There may be other solutions that may work even better than the proposed solution by the author. The town council of Balmer Island my undertake a project to make people aware of the accidents. The rules can be made more strict than before for both of the moped drivers and the pedestrians. These solutions can work better than the proposed one.
Thirdly, in the argument, the author presents a comparision between Balmer Island and Seaville town. This comparison is not compatible because the author has not mentioned enough information that may support the given comparision. The situation of the Balmer Island may completely differ form the situation of the Seaville Island such as the main sources of accidents may not be same in the two locations. Moreover, the author indicates of summer while talking about Balmer Island but never indicates of summer while talking about Seaville town.So, the assumption that the solution that worked for Seaville town will also work for the Balmer Island is not feasible.
In conclusion, we can say that the argument could be strengthened if the author could prove that moped is the most popular transportation in Balmer. The argument could be further strengthened if the author can guarantee that the proposed solution is the only feasible solution for decreasing the accidents in Balmer Island. If the author could give a proper comparison between the two towns indicated in the argument, the argument would be logical. So, we can say that the authors argument is flawed for the aforementioned reasons.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Thirdly, in the argument, the author presents a comparision between Balmer Island and Seaville town.
Error: comparision Suggestion: comparison
Sentence: This comparison is not compatible because the author has not mentioned enough information that may support the given comparision.
Error: comparision Suggestion: comparison
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argument 1 -- not exactly
argument 2 -- not exactly
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 474 350
No. of Characters: 2356 1500
No. of Different Words: 169 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.666 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.97 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.664 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 185 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 117 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 87 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.609 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.92 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.826 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.361 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.549 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.138 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 123, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... factors that must be taken in account. In the argument, the author not only uses ...
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Line 2, column 164, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n the argument, the author not only uses ambiguous and vague terms, but also uses...
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Line 7, column 169, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y also involve in accidents. There is no clear information that may prove that mo...
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Line 11, column 170, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...uthor. The town council of Balmer Island my undertake a project to make people aw...
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Line 15, column 172, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ble because the author has not mentioned enough information that may support the ...
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Line 18, column 29, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: So
...mmer while talking about Seaville town.So, the assumption that the solution that ...
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Line 20, column 171, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rtation in Balmer. The argument could be further strengthened if the author can g...
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Line 21, column 167, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ccidents in Balmer Island. If the author could give a proper comparison between t...
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Line 22, column 136, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...uld be logical. So, we can say that the authors argument is flawed for the aforementi...
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Line 22, column 170, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t the authors argument is flawed for the aforementioned reasons.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, while, in conclusion, such as, talking about, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.9520958084 178% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2436.0 2260.96107784 108% => OK
No of words: 473.0 441.139720559 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15010570825 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73318761382 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.374207188161 0.468620217663 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 751.5 705.55239521 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.40265177 57.8364921388 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.913043478 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5652173913 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.69565217391 5.70786347227 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 19.0 5.15768463074 368% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246089530898 0.218282227539 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0907348267252 0.0743258471296 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.084093842058 0.0701772020484 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102142505831 0.128457276422 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0843216535694 0.0628817314937 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.3799401198 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 98.500998004 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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